| Title: A Deal
| 30 Nov 2013 11:38 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Haha awesome. I can totally see Sevs irritation. How embarrasing. Who was he kissing, I wonder....
Oh that has to be painful. Poor Sev!
Author's Response: Haha, yes, poor Sev.
lol who was the woman!
Author's Response: Noone concrete, I am afraid. I deliberately left her undiscribed because I didnt want to be acused of Mary Stu-ing.
So who is the lucky woman then? Short but sweet, and - especially the description of Harry's reaction - made me smile.
Author's Response: Thank you very much, Rosina.
I'm not in love with this. Was there limit of words or something? Cos I believe it would be better if Severus try to haggle more, react more emotional on this request or something. Like that I think it's plain, blank even... and there is few moments when I had simple question - who, what, why? Well, for me it's just to little, it could be good prologue to something, though.
Author's Response: Thank you very much for your review and your honest opinion, Sirena. I will keep in mind what you’ve said when writing my next story. My goal is to improve my writing skills. Thank you for helping me.
Haha, great story! And it's nice that Sev has a girlfriend (?)... he deserves a little happiness. I liked his very "Slytherin" reaction to Harry witnessing the kiss.
Great to see you here on P&S!
Author's Response: Thank you for your review, and welcome. Severus deserve someone in his life, doesn’t he?
LOL! That was hilarious! Thanks for the laugh. Great little story
Author's Response: Thank you very much, hpfanficfan.
Oh, I'm dying to know who the woman is! LOL
Very cute. I love how Slytherin Harry was with that deal.
Author's Response: Thank you very much for your kind words. I also wonder who the woman could be. When I figure it out, I might write a sequel :)
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