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Reviews For The Fox in the Briar Patch
Tom is an interesting character. I imagine him as a large man with large, strong arms, but I don't really know how else to picture him. I would have liked maybe more of an image from Harry's eyes. The large size and arms might be something I just made up. I really, really like how Tom's family sort of has a family business in collecting the runaway Muggle born and the like. I'm unsure of Tom's social status, well I guess I am more confused, because I always thought that he was more of the lower class, and now I'm not sure. I think maybe more mannerisms, or maybe the speech making him more of a lower class would help my confusion, but then again, maybe he's not from the lower class. I'll have to reread the first Harry Potter book again. I really like that Tom is helping Harry though. I like all the point of views. I'd like more comments on Tom's physical features, and maybe details about what kind of man he was. I'd like to see more actions, or developed physical traits that help us understand the character more, and not mostly a narrative telling us. I liked the details of the zoo, but felt that the part from the waitresses's perspective didn't add much to the story. I see how Harry was able to eat cake later when he was hurt, but other than that the part with the waitress seemed unnecessary to the plot and character buildup of the story. The whole scene at the zoo lunch table seemed a bit stilted and not in line with the rest of the story. I like how someone treated Harry well, in a way. It does show how bad the Durlsey's are, but I feel like it all could be shortened and more concise so that the story could move on. Poor Harry getting beaten like that. I am glad that his aunt found enough compassion to help him, even just a little. It seemed very realistic for her to think that staying with Vernon was okay because he treated her and HER child alright. I wonder if something is allowing Vernon to hurt Harry, and void Harry's wishes not to be noticed when he is to be "punished." I liked how Harry was curious about his parents and wanted to research them, but I wonder if the time spent in the library, and learning about his parents really shape his character as much as the later events. I think that part might have made the chapter drag for a little bit, but overall I find the pace of the story to be good. But I like the story so far, love the length of the chapters and everything that has happened. The chapter probably could be split between The Zoo and Harry finding The Leaky Cauldron. Sometimes shorter chapters get you more reviews. Harry's a cute kid, and Tom's a fun character to learn more about. Near the end, Tom is referred to as a landowner, and I was wondering is he really a landowner if he owns a pub and inn? I really am enjoying this story so far, and I am wrapped up in it! Well done and marvelous job creating this universe for our favorite characters to play in! :)
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