| Title: Diagon Alley
| 18 Nov 2012 6:39 pm
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| Reviewer: Anne (Anonymous)
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For some reason when I try to read the next chapter I get exactly one word:
"by"
centred in the middle of the chapter space.
Considering that's about 8000 words less than what I'm told is the chapter length, the website's glitched out.
I do enjoy this story though, so I hope it gets sorted soon as I'd like to see the next chatper.
Author's Response: Hi - sorry about the problems. Have now deleted and reposted the chapter.
I look forward to reading more of this wonderful story!!
| Title: Diagon Alley
| 15 Nov 2012 10:51 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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I love your style of writing it is very easy to read and although detailed does not drag the story down. Thank you so much for such a well put together tale.
I hope that you continue the story soon. I would love to read what happens next!
This story is great so far please continue this because I would really like to see how you run with the Harry Snape dynamic .
Gosh, that was a marathon, but in a good way - I like long chapters, although you could easily have split that into 2 good length ones. There were so many good bits, where do I start? Good goblins! The wand, the book titles, the kneazle and Hedwig! I liked how you introduced Severus, and love all the detail you're weaving into the story. Hope there's lots more to come.
I liked the slightly different slant you gave to the zoo story, and smiled when Petunia got told off for Dudley's behaviour. Nice to see a bit of a back story for Tom - it looks like Harry has fallen on his feet there.
Not sure whats going on with Voldemort, although no doubt it will become clear as the story progresses. Its nice to see Harry able to sneak himself water and food - I can never believe stories where he doesn't even manage to grab a piece of bacon despite cooking it all.One thing - he was locked up till Wednesday when he would belet out to carry all Dudley's shopping, but when Weds came he was left alone to do housework. Nice start though.
| Title: Prologue
| 13 Nov 2012 1:44 am
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| Reviewer: M4073 (Anonymous)
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I'm really enjoying this so far, and am looking forward to reading more! This is a highly original story so far!
However, I think I found a continuity error (if not just ignore me). You have Harry mentioning that it was his birthday in the first chapter "Happy birthday to me.", but then it's mentioned again in this chapter several times. So did Harry somehow find a time-turner and live through the months of July and August twice, or am I just completely misreading things here? I hope it's the latter, even if that means I need my brain examined.
Author's Response: heya - it's not a continuity error - there's a 2 year gap between prologue and chapter 1 and 2 (notice that Dudley and Harry jump from 9 to 11)
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