Title: Chapter 9: Dementors At Hogwarts?!
| 23 Apr 2013 6:44 am
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Reviewer: Katrina (Signed)
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This is a good story. I like it.
Title: Chapter 9: Dementors At Hogwarts?!
| 29 Mar 2013 5:32 am
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Reviewer: Zaiferz (Signed)
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Amazing as always!! omigawd i just wanted to hug everyone lmao a weird ass feeling to have but still, it seemed like what i should do.
I can't wait to read the next one! i was on the edge of my seat the entire tme through this chapter! good job..no BRILLIANT job! heehee :D
update soon! please and thank you
CLAPS* Excellent....captivating. MORE MORE MORE! ( Stars at the screen and waits for a new chapter
Title: Chapter 9: Dementors At Hogwarts?!
| 05 Mar 2013 11:54 am
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Reviewer: kakashi (Anonymous)
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I really love your story. It has a nice plot and your writing is not bad. I totally love Snape/Lucius stories. But don't be mad at me for criticizing you a little bit. The way you wrote the first two chapters were wonderful. There were enough dialogue and description of the feelings. It gave me the feeling to read more. But from chapter 3 on forward, it was too much description. The way you wrote...I couldn't understand you sometimes. It could be because english is not my first language, but I'm not sure if this is the case. I can understand that you want to describe Harry's / Saturn's feelings well, but to much information is not always good. And I really miss some plot in your chapters. You write so much in every chapter, but there is very little dialogue between the characters. And this is what made me hard to read the last chapters of your story.
Please don't get me wrong, I really like your story. I want to enjoy it till the end. That's why I wanted to tell you my thoughts about it.
I hope I didn't discourage you with my little review and I like to read a new chapter soon.
Title: Chapter 9: Dementors At Hogwarts?!
| 28 Feb 2013 4:12 am
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Reviewer: Kaelisea (Anonymous)
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Your story is like reading poetry! Vert poetic & creative- as an illustrator it inspires me to paint! Good job can't wait to see more.
Title: Chapter 5: Diagon Alley & Unexpected Surprises
| 27 Feb 2013 1:46 am
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Reviewer: Slee9 (Anonymous)
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This story is filled with an unnecessary amount of description. I tried to read it because the plot was good but grew bored. "smug smile of knowing"... really? Smug. That's it, that was all you needed. I hope you realise that big words, or long paragraphs don't ,necesarily, improve the content. Vary your sentence structure and trim the fat!
Title: Chapter 9: Dementors At Hogwarts?!
| 23 Feb 2013 5:23 am
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Reviewer: Godiva9 (Signed)
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Love it, keep up the good work!
Poor Saturn! While he may not "be" Harry any more, some things don't change as easily as a name (or even an appearance!) The saying "old habits die hard" is very true. Harry will protect first, even to his own detriment, he will not think to ask for help first(if at all) because that has never been available to him (besides Ron and Hermione). I hope Sev and Lucius realize this and don't take it out on the poor boy to badly.
So--If his patronus was his dad "prongs" before the change--is that wonderful bunny patronus the form of his "new" father--Lucius?
Loved it.
V.
Title: Chapter 9: Dementors At Hogwarts?!
| 22 Feb 2013 11:02 pm
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Reviewer: hawkswench (Signed)
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Poor Saturn/Harry, I do hope Lucius has fun in destroying her. With Fudge groveling before Harry.
Title: Chapter 4: Some Answers & Woodland Elves
| 22 Feb 2013 6:23 pm
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Reviewer: Lord Voldything (Anonymous)
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I love the poetic descriptions.
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