| Title: Chapter 4: Some Answers & Woodland Elves
| 18 Jan 2013 3:18 pm
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| Reviewer: Hesperis (Anonymous)
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Very, very nice chapter! Your style of writing is superb. I have only one plea ...could you separate each scene with some hyphen or symbol? It would be a little easier to take in...
Thank you for the chapter! I'm looking forward the next one! =o)
| Title: Chapter 3: Awakening in the Dark
| 13 Jan 2013 2:01 pm
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| Reviewer: Fringie7 (Anonymous)
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| Title: Chapter 3: Awakening in the Dark
| 12 Jan 2013 9:10 am
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| Reviewer: missny1 (Anonymous)
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Really enjoying the story and love the tenderness you show between Saturn and his fathers. I'm glad he is seeing warmth and caring, all children should have that! Can't wait to read more.
You may have struggled, but it was wonderfully painted. Your imagery in the dream was superb and the description of his emotions upon awakening excellent.
One question, why didn't LM share the letter with SS? It would show him that his dear friend Lily did not knowingly betray Severus. Wouldn't that be a good thing? Just wondering.
Thank you for the update. I am loving this story--so new and creative!
V.
There was little interaction between the three family members in this chapter and I admit it's disappointing but all the same, it makes me look forward to reading the next chapter even morel go far there has been little action and a lot of description but that only makes sense as we as the readers are getting familiar with the characters. Please update again soon! I'm truly looking forward to when all three of them are able to talk to each other.
Like story so far so how did albus get hold of him
| Title: Chapter 3: Awakening in the Dark
| 11 Jan 2013 5:22 am
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| Reviewer: Baghi (Signed)
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This was actually pretty good. It still leaves me wanting more :3. Also, I've been there, frequently, where I have no inspiration to write. Kudos for working through it.
| Title: Chapter 3: Awakening in the Dark
| 11 Jan 2013 3:25 am
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| Reviewer: Outlawgal (Signed)
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Ancient Wood Elf...COOL!!!
ooooo good desctriptive words. It makes me see the pucture in my head when reading it. Nicely done.
So...Lucius is the prince of all elfs and Sev is just a normal wizard?
Where did the the old Harry bravory go? Did it go do to him changing?
Is Lucius a Death Eater are there death eaters and Voldemort?
Your probably already explained these and my quiestion are irrelevent which makes me stupid but hey stupid is as stupid does :P
Is Draco in the next chapter?
When Harry goes back to school will he chage his looks or will he still have the pointy ears?
Ok enough questions for now :P
I loved it, you have gained a new reader and I review everytime I read so expect to hear from me.
This was brillant, and sweet, I'm looking forward to the Draco and Harry interaction.
I'm curious though is this a Manipulating Albus for the Greater good story? I don't care either way, like I said your writing is awesome.
And the fact that you'll have consistent updates, *sigh* I need to take a page out of your book. Untiil the next update :)
Above the bar! Don't doubt yourself!
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