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Title: The Champion's Family 12 Apr 2013 12:06 pm
Reviewer: rosina (Signed) [Report This]
    Like the start, nothing wrong with a bit of fluff! I'm glad you decided to write a story for this challenge; I thought it looked interesting when I saw it.It's nice to see my favourite Harry/Ginny pairing as there don't seem to be that many of those on this site, and I thought the Harry/Dursleys interaction was just right. Not overly friendly, or too unpleasant, but I daresay Vernon is Up To Something.
    While it doesn't bother me as it adds to the interest, I just wonder if the little tweaks you've made mean it should be AU rather than Canon? Anyway, looking forward to more and the appearance of Snape.
Title: The Champion's Family 12 Apr 2013 8:10 am
Reviewer: Whitetail (Signed) [Report This]
    Hmmm ... interesting kickoff. I like your explanation of why the Dursleys would come. I see you've taken some liberties with the canon plot, but I don't really mind. I have taught myself to expect GoF fanfics to be really different from canon because it is my favorite book and otherwise I'd nitpick! Although, on the subject of nitpicking (Sorry, hehe, told myself I wouldn't do that) I don't know if this was intentional, but didn't Harry fight the Hungarian Horntail, rather than the Fireball? Forgive me if I am wrong but it just didn't seem to be an intentional change, like having Luna appear and whatnot. ;) Anyway, fun chapter.
    The Dursleys seem a little frighteningly tame, and that will certainly add to the grandeur of the eventual disaster that they are bound to create! Oh, and I liked Dudley's enthusiasm. Slightly frightened, but in awe. Enough rambling ... looking forward to next chapter!
Title: The Champion's Family 12 Apr 2013 7:34 am
Reviewer: mithrilandtj (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Prize is 1000 galleons, not 100
Title: The Champion's Family 12 Apr 2013 7:24 am
Reviewer: Chicago Myth (Signed) [Report This]
    great start! Can't wait to see where this goes
Title: The Champion's Family 12 Apr 2013 7:01 am
Reviewer: Fairner (Signed) [Report This]
    Can't wait for more!
    I really want to see Severus and Tuney arguing! xD lol
Title: The Champion's Family 12 Apr 2013 6:44 am
Reviewer: heartstar (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I love this more when you can ok lol
Title: The Champion's Family 12 Apr 2013 4:35 am
Reviewer: SeverusPrince101 (Signed) [Report This]
    well, this shows promise! I greatly enjoy your stories, can't wait to read more on this!!!
Title: The Champion's Family 12 Apr 2013 4:24 am
Reviewer: Outlawgal (Signed) [Report This]
    That was really good and I am surprised that the Dursley's exspecially Dudley liked the school as much as they did. I am sure they are being nice for the money well Petunia and Vernon but I really think Dudley is very interested and enjoying himself. I can't wait for more. Nicely written piece
Title: The Champion's Family 12 Apr 2013 3:39 am
Reviewer: bridgeportfox (Signed) [Report This]
    I suppose the Dursleys felt that the visit to Hogwarts was a win win situation for them. Either Harry wins (gold!) or he could get injured (an injury they can't be blamed for!). Their reactions to Hogwarts has been interesting. I'm sure that Petunia is horrified at Dudley's enthusiasm for all the cool magical things he has seen. Looking forward to what comes next.
Title: The Champion's Family 12 Apr 2013 3:30 am
Reviewer: kazetoame (Anonymous) [Report This]
    The idea was brilliant, but I must admit, I am horribly miffed. If this was supposed to follow the books, you've horribly over shot. Sorry, it's the whole Ginny thing (bloody fan girl that she is needs to go away) then Harry's grades and also Luna didnt meet him till book five and Neville didnt really hang out with the trio (yes I've said it, those three kinda stayed to themselves for most of the books). It just doesn't seem up to your usual standards. I'm sorry about the negativity, but I just couldn't give this a good review.

    Author's Response: It's fancition.  I always take liberties with things, including sometimes changing the sequence of events.  Granted I did make a mistake with the type of Dragon Harry fought, and the ammount of prize money, but those were unintentional.  In this story Harry needed to be dating Ginny and being friends with a lot of people so that the Dursleys could see how wrong they were and be baffled at Harry's popularity and success.  If you didn't like it, then you didn't like it and that's fine, but I don't see the start of this story as a mistake or horribly overshot.

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