| Title: Blackness
| 07 Nov 2015 9:25 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Very well done as not too OOC but showing concern thank you
Twice in this CH you said 'curse through'. I just wanted to mention that the term is 'course'. 'It coursed through his veins...'. Otherwise I'm really enjoying the story and your writing.
I think this is my favorite chapter yet! Snape being (gasp) nice, the students defending Snape, and poor Harry getting sick and being taken care of! The perfect chapter (:
| Title: Blackness
| 04 Jul 2013 7:05 pm
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| Reviewer: Meatball42 (Anonymous)
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Really enjoying this so far! An unusual take on the post-Occlumency fic, and I really like the way you're starting to shift Harry's perceptions of Snape and vice versa. Looking forward to more!
You've done a great job developing this scenario while keeping Snape and Harry in character! I'm enjoying the story. :-)
Do you want minor corrections? For example, you have "curse through" rather than "course through." (This is probably a typo, but if not "course" in this sense means to race swiftly, from the term for hunting with a greyhound, whippet, or other hound that hunts by sight.)
| Title: Blackness
| 30 Jun 2013 11:57 am
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| Reviewer: Saphron (Anonymous)
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Loving your story so far. Can't wait for the next chapter.
| Title: Blackness
| 30 Jun 2013 7:18 am
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| Reviewer: mithrilandtj (Anonymous)
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I like this caring Snape.
And I'd really like to read the reaction to his 'attack' in Potions class with Snape & Umbitch
| Title: Blackness
| 30 Jun 2013 12:24 am
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Definitely positive thank you for a great chapter
Hahahaha. They worked sort-of almost hard on the essay. And got bad grades. Bummer. Umbridge interrogating the students in Snape's classroom was a great scene. Clearly they hate her even more than Snape. Sounds like Snape was able to teach Harry some Occlumency technique since Voldy wasn't able to get into his mind. Poor Harry - damned if he learns it or not. One comment - you mentioned that Harry wrenched. I believe the word you wanted was retched.
Looking forward to more. Can't wait
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