Poor Severus. It sounds like he managed to keep up his shields in spite of everything. You did a good job showing his confusion and pain during the long night. Sirius has done a good job healing what he can for Snape but I'm suprised they didn't call Pomfrey and Dumbledore. Speaking of Dumbledore, he is going to be appalled at the injuries.
| Title: Verboseness
| 04 Aug 2013 1:07 pm
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| Reviewer: Riddletobien (Anonymous)
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You have managed a fine job of keeping them in-character. For me that is the only interesting thing to read. I think you portrayed Snape's care for Harry after the attack very well.
I would like to point out that in this chapter, I find Snape summoning a tea-service out of character. Even if he is understanding of Harry's anger, the scene for me would work better without the tea service. Also, I think that Snape's and Sirius' understanding would have taken longer. I could see them finally not attacking eachothers troats, but not with an offer of friendship in the mix, and certainly not so fast.
Nevertheless I think your writing is impressive!
| Title: Helpfulness
| 01 Aug 2013 5:45 pm
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| Reviewer: ethuil (Anonymous)
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am loving this story! and it's good cheesy lol :P
| Title: Helpfulness
| 30 Jul 2013 3:40 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Not cheesy at all just rather sweet and much needed!
This was really sweet toward the end. I liked it, especially after what Snape had to suffer at Voldemort's hands. Nice mixture of hurt and comfort. I am looking forward to reading more.
| Title: Helpfulness
| 30 Jul 2013 8:54 am
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| Reviewer: Alexis (Anonymous)
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I love this story so much! I can't wait to read more. :)
Yay, Sirius! And Harry has no idea why he was reassuring, does he? :-)
Happily waiting for more!
That wasn't cheesey at all! Great job. I love how you have both Sirius and Snape playing a part in Harry's life. I think also that Sirius is gaining respect for Snape and vice versa.
I hope that Snape is going to be alright. Can't wait to see what comes next.
Aw, I didn't think it was cheesy! I thought it was just right. I particularly enjoyed the details about Dumbledore walking Snape to the apparition point.
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