| Title: The Empty Frame
| 25 Jan 2014 11:15 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Very good especially the scene with Lily can we have more of the children?
Author's Response: I'm planning to highlight each of the children in turn! The story is still in the opening phase; I hope to include family scenes to take the edge off the bigger mysteries from time to time. Thanks for reviewing, and glad you enjoyed Lily! She's fun to play with!
Sloppy, Harry! But who'd have thought he'd be good at inventing new charms - must be his mothers genes coming out. I really like what you're doing with the characters I recognise. You nailed Ron in a couple of sentences, and I totally agree with Snape about screen/hard copy reading. Little Lily was funny,innocent and full on - watch out when she grows up Harry. Sadly my lunch break is over and work beckons so I'll have to wait to read the next chapter.
Author's Response: I'm envisioning Harry as having completed his 7th Year at Hogwarts, finally being able to buckle down and really STUDY after he no longer has to worry about Voldemort every waking minute of his life. After graduation, Harry went into the Auror Training Program, and as an adult (he's now 33), he has excelled at Charms, not just Defense and Quidditch! // Yeah, computer screens make my eyes ache, so I can empathise with Snape! And little Lily is quite the handful, that's for sure! Thanks for reviewing-- on your lunch break, no less! Wow! I'm flattered!!!
Awesome chapter, it was great to see some detective work going on! Have the murders got something to do with Lucius I wonder... The bit with Lily was really sweet too :)
Author's Response: Lily-- hee! I'm hoping to give each child a solo from time to time-- I think that will help highlight their individual personalities! You'll have to keep wondering about Lucius, I'm afraid... ;-D As for the detective work-- this is so much harder to write than it is to read! What was I THINKING of??! But I vow to do my best! I've got to start somewhere, right? *giggles* Thanks for reviewing this chapter! Glad you liked it!
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