| Title: Chapter 8
| 13 Mar 2014 12:35 am
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Thank you a great chapter
| Title: Chapter 7
| 13 Mar 2014 12:12 am
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Thank you an interesting chapter
| Title: Chapter 7
| 12 Mar 2014 7:06 am
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| Reviewer: Bill-Dog (Anonymous)
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Thanks for the chapter Whitsnitch91! I appreciate the dynamic between Snape, Pierce, and Harry. Pierce adds a great element to the story. You are developing his character well. I am interested in seeing how Pierce and Harry work out their lives with Snape since they are both dealing with it so differently. I also like to see Snape healing, in a way, through this second chance he has with Harry and himself. This scene is difficult because there are so many different ways to discipline kids so it must have been hard to write, but i like how it demonstrates the differences between the characters.
| Title: Chapter 8
| 11 Mar 2014 11:35 pm
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| Reviewer: Lea (Anonymous)
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I like your story very much - it's interesting plot and definitely it has potential. relations between both boys and Severus and them are very well described :)
And definitely I would like to know more about Severus's time travel.
If may have a little advice, please try to check spelling, and mostly - if changing the topic / situation (e.g. Severus in his quarters after Harry's plays with spells) try to mark it somehow (like *~*~*~*~*~between different situations. It will be easier to read.
| Title: Chapter 6
| 11 Mar 2014 1:27 am
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Very well done thank you
Author's Response: Thank you :)
I will have another couple of chapters up this weekend :)
| Title: Chapter 5
| 11 Mar 2014 1:10 am
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Thank you good explanation!
| Title: Chapter 4
| 11 Mar 2014 12:53 am
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Really good chapter thank you
| Title: Chapter 3
| 11 Mar 2014 12:44 am
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| Title: Chapter 2
| 11 Mar 2014 12:37 am
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Good description but please use capital letters for proper nouns and the possessive pronoun as in God's house
Author's Response: Hey Fmh,
I'll pay more attention to that, thank you.
| Title: Chapter 1
| 11 Mar 2014 12:31 am
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Rather jumped into the middle of this I think. Not realistic to w all 20days from Surrey and not get to London yet! Apart from that a good start!
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