Nice start! Very angst-filled background to the end of Voldemort, and Harry's survivor guilt. Poor kid.
I think this chapter could have used a few more physical details or small actions at first to help us better get present into the scene and the characters' heads. I felt a little distant, like I was in the storm trying to listen with the wind to distract me.
I really like the set-up with Voldemort dead, and Harry a bit more traumatized about it without anything to focus on, no purpose to his life.
Great job with Harry's thoughts. I like how Snape was the one to catch him out of bounds, and noticed the look over the edge of the tower before he left.
| Title: Chapter 1
| 19 Jul 2014 11:08 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Thank you a promising start. I hope your other stories will be continued!
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