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Title: Darkening World 07 Aug 2014 1:16 am
Reviewer: The Lonely God With A Box (Signed) [Report This]
    It's always bothered me a bit that a one-year-old could remember anything, even a traumatic event. Still, good chapter.
Title: Darkening World 22 Jul 2014 10:19 am
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    It's great that Harry wants to research his past - that seems very like him. I wonder why he doesn't want to confide in his friends. I can't remember if he told his friends about hearing voices in second year at first. Did he? I vaguely remember Harry thinking that even in the Wizarding world hearing voices was too strange to share. Does he think that the screaming and voices when Dementors are near is too strange to share too? Or is it too personal?

    I wonder if the goblin theory was right. No... I don't think so, but I can't rule anything out yet in this story!

    Great job adding in November 2nd as the worst day of the Dursley's lives. The mystery deepens! Poor little Harry having to be left out while his family left for fun things on that day.

    I like that the teachers have a big conference two weeks into the school year. I wonder if the students are going to gain weight and get fat from having to eat so much chocolate.

    I'm glad that Snape noticed how badly Harry's been suffering and feels guilty about it. Why are the Dementors so attracted to Harry?

    How did Snape know what memories the Dementors make Harry relive?

    Why isn't Harry curious about the Dementors, why they are attracted to him so, and how to protect himself from them? I'm a little surprised that Harry isn't researching that as well.

    It seems that this Hermione was refused a time-turner. She should be refused one! This will make things interesting. I hope that Hermione will drop divination. She doesn't like it and thinks it is useless in the book/movies.

    Poor Harry. He seems like he is in a mess this year already, even worse than in the books! Five encounters with Dementors when they affect him so much is awful. How come the Crucio can hurt him when he is remembering it? Poor baby Harry, poor thing. Great job describing the memory. It seems so real.

    Did Madame Pomfrey really not notice Harry's injuries when she assessed him? Or is something else going on?

    I'm really glad that the teachers seem to be protecting Harry from the Dementors.

    So is Harry avoiding his friends because he feels so terrible and he doesn't believe that his friends can or should join him where he is emotionally?

    Great start to the story, I enjoyed this chapter and the mystery unfolding. There were a few errors and you might do well to get a beta reader to go through and correct some of them.

    This is a fascinating start and I am very interested in what will happen next. You did a very good job painting a picture of this school year for Harry.

    Great job with the details and descriptions in this chapter, but especially great job with the flashback memory scene. Poor Harry just can't get a break.
Title: Darkening World 19 Jul 2014 11:48 pm
Reviewer: Fmh (Signed) [Report This]
    Thank you a very thoughtful and carefully put together story
Title: Darkening World 16 Jul 2014 5:26 am
Reviewer: Lili (Anonymous) [Report This]
    This is great!!!! I can't wait for more :)
Title: Darkening World 11 Jul 2014 7:32 pm
Reviewer: Abie (Signed) [Report This]
    I'm hooked! Poor Harry. Anxiously awaiting an update

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