Thanks for the great chapter
| Title: Chapter 3
| 21 Sep 2014 11:47 pm
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| Reviewer: Arwen_Evenstar (Anonymous)
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Hi! I'm so excited about this sequel! This is one of the best fics I've read in a long time. I understand that English is a second language to you, and it is very good. :) just one little idea, when you said that Tobias was catholic, you said he wasn't religious but believed in God and scripture. This could confuse some people, as being religious is believing some sort of faith. The word you might be looking for in that particular sentence is probably devout. :) To be devout is to have a deep Commitment, like going to church multiple times a week and spending hours in prayer a day etc. Just an idea :D you are doing great! I'm loving this series.
Author's Response: Hey, thanks a lot. I will incorporate your suggestion when I go over both stories to correct them.
| Title: Chapter 3
| 08 Sep 2014 12:38 am
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Thank you a great chapter
Author's Response: thank you
I was glad that Harry and Severus made up so quickly. Harry isn't one to stay angry long with someone he care about. The Quidditch training between Harry and Severus was cute. I liked the idea of using the soft balls for Harry to practice dodging.
Author's Response: Yes, its mainly Harry's emotional state ad insecurity after the dursleys and being taken care of from Snape that make him go a bit emotional easily. We'll have him working on that, of course, but you'll see more in the ext chapters :)
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