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Title: Chapter 6 19 Sep 2014 10:51 pm
Reviewer: Fmh (Signed) [Report This]
    Excellent chapter not too mawkish and very good ending with Tobias thank you

    Author's Response: Thanks a lot, hope you'll enjoy the next one too
Title: Chapter 6 19 Sep 2014 2:41 am
Reviewer: bridgeportfox (Signed) [Report This]
    I liked that Snape encouraged Harry to talk to people he respected about the adoption. Harry must have liked being given some control of the process. The Alzheimer's scene was sad. It must have hit Harry hard that the man that had been so happy to have him around didn't remember him at all.

    Author's Response: Yeah, the sadness doesn't end there... Thanks for mentioning about Sev encouraging Harry to talk to others, you are one of the few who did and I thought it was a major thing o.O
Title: Chapter 6 18 Sep 2014 4:15 am
Reviewer: Dysall75 (Signed) [Report This]
    I am not criticizing you but while I really liked this chapter, there were some parts that I didn't understand.

    There were some parts missing from this chapter.

    1. " .", Snape said dangerously, anger flaring up in his chest. At first Harry was unsure how to react – Snape had no right to order him around – but that wasn't Snape. That was Severus, his Papa and even though Harry was angry with him, he also respected him. He settled for sitting down and glaring at him "You will not speak to me in this manner. I admit that I sometimes feel jealous of your relationship with Lupin but that has nothing to do with this. As before, when Black is caught and Lupin is proven innocent, I will have no reserve against letting you two spend time together. Until then, he remains a danger."

    (What did Snape order Harry to do? There was only a ".")

    2. Minerva smiled fondly at this

    (Was there supposed to be more to this sentence. There is no period at the end and it ended a little short.)

    3. "What was the source of his... anger?", the nurse asked, Severus glanced at Harry and answered

    "He could not remember my son any more."

    (Shouldn't this be more than a separated runon sentence? More like:

    "What was the source of his...anger?", the nurse asked Severus.

    He turned to her and said, "He could not remember my son any more.")
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    Are you going to rewrite this chapter or explain the missing parts in the next one?

    I hope you update soon.

    Author's Response:

    Hi,

     the only missing part was what Severus said, I wrote it with periods in between and for some reason that gets deleted... He said "Sit down", the second was only missing a period and the third is as it was supposed to be: the nurse said it, then Severus glances at Harry (because he wants to see how he's doing, he is unsure about how to say the next thing and hopes not to hurt his feelings)before he answers her. While I don't mind questions or pointing out mistakes (so I can fix them), I was missing your opinion on the content... :(


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