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Reviews For Love is a Haven
Author's Response: Thanks a lot, hope you'll enjoy the next one too
Author's Response: Yeah, the sadness doesn't end there... Thanks for mentioning about Sev encouraging Harry to talk to others, you are one of the few who did and I thought it was a major thing o.O
There were some parts missing from this chapter. 1. " .", Snape said dangerously, anger flaring up in his chest. At first Harry was unsure how to react – Snape had no right to order him around – but that wasn't Snape. That was Severus, his Papa and even though Harry was angry with him, he also respected him. He settled for sitting down and glaring at him "You will not speak to me in this manner. I admit that I sometimes feel jealous of your relationship with Lupin but that has nothing to do with this. As before, when Black is caught and Lupin is proven innocent, I will have no reserve against letting you two spend time together. Until then, he remains a danger." (What did Snape order Harry to do? There was only a ".") 2. Minerva smiled fondly at this (Was there supposed to be more to this sentence. There is no period at the end and it ended a little short.) 3. "What was the source of his... anger?", the nurse asked, Severus glanced at Harry and answered "He could not remember my son any more." (Shouldn't this be more than a separated runon sentence? More like: "What was the source of his...anger?", the nurse asked Severus. He turned to her and said, "He could not remember my son any more.") *************************************** Are you going to rewrite this chapter or explain the missing parts in the next one? I hope you update soon. Author's Response: Hi, the only missing part was what Severus said, I wrote it with periods in between and for some reason that gets deleted... He said "Sit down", the second was only missing a period and the third is as it was supposed to be: the nurse said it, then Severus glances at Harry (because he wants to see how he's doing, he is unsure about how to say the next thing and hopes not to hurt his feelings)before he answers her. While I don't mind questions or pointing out mistakes (so I can fix them), I was missing your opinion on the content... :(
Author's Response: I will try to help getting Harry and Sev closer through surmounting the insecurities. I hope I'll be able to do that well enough
Author's Response: Oh, I wouldn't mind that either, but sadly Severus does not cooperate :( Well, not in this installment that is ;)
Author's Response: thank you, I hope you enjoy it
Author's Response: The movies were "Star Wars" and "Titanic" ;) I really do believe that is the case with Vernon, he is very homophibic in my eyes. Haha! The insecurities we have developed will stay for a while but I think we should be working on clearing them away instead of adding more ;)
Author's Response: thank you, I hope you enjoy it
Author's Response: thank you, I hope you enjoy it
Author's Response: Thanks a lot for sharing that with me and complimenting me on the scene. As I've been fortunate enough to never have lost anybody in the close family I do not actually know a lot about it. So writing Tobias' illness and death is quite difficult for me and I always second guess myself. I will not have Remus see Sirius for exactly that reason, the story would end right there! |
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