The optimist in me is ever hopeful you’ll come back to this one day.
Thanks for your fast-paced story. It was a page-turner. I hope you continue one day, but thanks for what you’ve posted so far!
I so hope you continue this! I love it! Pleasee, updatee!
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| 15 Jan 2016 4:15 pm
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| Reviewer: KittenCupcakes (Anonymous)
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I sooooo hope you continue this! It's brilliant!
| Title: Chapter Thirteen
| 13 Aug 2015 3:00 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Aah! Love the fluff! Thank you so much for updating the story
| Title: Chapter Thirteen
| 11 Aug 2015 1:27 am
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| Reviewer: Guest (Anonymous)
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Woooo! They finally had a moment! YESH! Haha. I loved it. Someone slap happy Umbridge, please! I'll do it! XD My favorite part has to be Severus 'rescuing' Harry from Umbridge's grasp. That was lovely. :) Bytheway, I'm the same who reviewed chapter eleven. To your reply about what parts feel rushed, it tends to be mainly the parts between Harry and Severus. I'm not sure how to quite fix that in your writing. I've been editing my own stuff, which happens to be like 3 years old, and my style has greatly changed in that time. My writing feels rushed, plus a lot of useless dialogue. I've been striping and combining lines of dialogue, and making it more concise. I'm thinking that with yours, you might try looking over your dialogue and see if certain lines are needed, or if they can be consolidated. This advice is only a suggestion and to help you grow as a writer. I just want to say that I love all your writings and think you have a wonderful talent. So keep it up! My writing at your age was absolutely CRINGE worthy. *laughs*
I hope they find away to lock Umbitch in Azkaban soon.
Two wrongs don't make a right. I loved how you ended the chapter! Awesome!!
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