¨Harry looked at Draco. He really looked at the boy. They were the same. Different sides of the same coin. All his life, all he ever wanted was a family. Someone who would love him unconditionally. Draco, he thought, had everything. The name, wealth, and a mom and dad. Things Harry never had or never would have. Harry saw that Draco's life was no better than his own. There was no love in the Malfoy house.¨
Sniff. It's just like Merlin. Harry and Draco are two sides of the same coin, like Merlin and Arthur are. This made me cry so much. It descended into such violence... I was going to bawl my eyes out if Minerva was like Moody. So glad she is such a good human being.
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| 07 Oct 2014 11:01 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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I liked the conversation between the boys thank you
| Title: The Right Friends
| 30 Sep 2014 1:35 am
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| Reviewer: my_patronus_is_a_dinosaur (Anonymous)
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WOW - VERY powerful storyline! Amazing details, angsty emotions, very well written! Compelling! I can't wait to read more!
The story is intriguing, but I wish you'd be more careful with details: Moody's first name is spelled Alastor, breath is "bated" not "baited," Brits say "Mum" not "Mom," and so on. Everyone lets some mistakes slip through, but yours are frequent enough to be distracting. Please get yourself a beta. I wouldn't bother to suggest this if I didn't think your fic was worth the effort, so please don't be offended.
Author's Response: You're beta-ing Digging the Bones, aren't you? I think part of the problem with the mistakes is the co-authorness of it. We're each other betas. I realized his first name was misspelled after the first time it was used, and then continued misspelling it on purpose to make it consistent at least. Point on the "bated," I suppose. I've heard Brits say "Mom" too. It's personal preference. No offense taken.
| Title: The Right Friends
| 28 Sep 2014 6:00 am
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| Reviewer: Lili (Anonymous)
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Wonderful!!! I love the development! Looking forward to more.
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| 28 Sep 2014 5:42 am
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| Reviewer: eclipse (Anonymous)
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Amazing... please update some more :)
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