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Reviews For Spiral of Trust
Title: Chapter 13 Close 26 Mar 2015 12:59 am
Reviewer: bridgeportfox (Signed) [Report This]
    Good description of how depression feels and how the bereaved react to it. Ginny seems to be objecting a bit too much. I wonder if she had been considering it and, now that she sees people's grief, is fervently rejecting the whole thing?

    Author's Response: Thanks. Ginny certainly seems to be in denial of something. I believe that the expressions of grief at the school reminds her of her family's sorrow, which, if you remenmber (chapters 1 and 2), she had difficulties to tolerate during the summer. My guess is that Harry's reaction to the suicide made Ginny realise how close her boy-friend had been to doing something similar and that shocked her as well.
Title: Chapter 13 Close 25 Mar 2015 9:13 pm
Reviewer: crazychick84 (Signed) [Report This]
    Phew glad Ron is ok! ;)

    Author's Response: Me too :-)
Title: Chapter 12 Righteousness and guilt 20 Mar 2015 10:05 pm
Reviewer: Fmh (Signed) [Report This]
    Very interesting especially about Alzheimer's and obliviating thank you for an angsty chapter!
Title: Chapter 12 Righteousness and guilt 19 Mar 2015 10:37 pm
Reviewer: BlueWater5 (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Nicely written.

    Author's Response: Thank you :-)
Title: Chapter 12 Righteousness and guilt 19 Mar 2015 4:53 pm
Reviewer: tb_ll57 (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I continue to enjoy this story very much. I most appreciate the pace of your story. You are really allowing time for the characters to experience ups and downs without rushing through either their trauma or their recovery, and I am so intrigued by the many details. I also enjoy the letters between Snape and Harry; it reminds me of classic literature with the exchange of correspondence, but you are also very good at capturing their voices in a more formal exchange than speech. I also really enjoy the dynamic between Ron and Hermione and Harry, with the bits of Ginny that are added here and there. Harry continues to mediate between them but now has his own outside support, but you've maintained the quiet sort of way that Harry always interacted with Ginny in the books, with so much of their inner thoughts on each other kept silent for the moment. Harry is insightful in his own way (I liked his explanation to Professor Cork which was very mature, as well as his reading of Burgess) but at heart he's a problem solver, so it's interesting that, without a problem between him and Ginny, there's no real momentum to their relationship.

    Thanks for the update, always fab!

    Author's Response:

    Thanks for taking time to review! Interesting observation about Harry's and Ginny's relationship. In the films, Ginny is a very quiet character, whereas, to me, she appears livlier and stronger in the books. That is what I try to work with in this story (although she is a side character), to make her a temperamental person, with a strong appetite for life.

    I agree that this is a longish story and I'm glad you don't mind that, because most probably it stems from my being an unexperienced writer. But that's the thing about fanfiction, isn't it? You are really allowed to wallow in your fantasies about your favourite characters. You write it as much for your own amusement as for your readers. 

Title: Chapter 12 Righteousness and guilt 19 Mar 2015 11:20 am
Reviewer: teriwright (Signed) [Report This]
    Another great chapter! I commend you for tackling head on the issues these kids would suffer from in the aftermath of war.

    I'm happy Harry found a way to communicate with Snape, since he's been forced to work with the Git, that doesn't include personal insults and humiliation that face-to-face encounters always seem to devolve to.

    Author's Response: Thanks! The letters were tolerably decent, I think, even if Snape's impatient character shone through.
Title: Chapter 11 A Strangling Incantation 15 Mar 2015 7:05 pm
Reviewer: Fmh (Signed) [Report This]
    I liked the action scene, it must be so hard to write them! Thank you a great chapter

    Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad to hear it. You never really know if a chapter will work, until you get some feed-back. 
Title: Chapter 5 The heart of a human 12 Mar 2015 10:57 pm
Reviewer: animefreak728 (Signed) [Report This]
    The ending of the chapter was brilliant. I will forever remember it. “You wound him up! You wound Voldemort up and he killed himself!” XD

    Author's Response: Thank you! Apparently Snape found it hilarious too ;-)
Title: Chapter 11 A Strangling Incantation 12 Mar 2015 9:48 pm
Reviewer: crazychick84 (Signed) [Report This]
    Great to see another chapter, once a week updates would be awesome :D

    Author's Response: Thanks! I'll keep up :-)
Title: Chapter 11 A Strangling Incantation 12 Mar 2015 2:58 am
Reviewer: bridgeportfox (Signed) [Report This]
    I thought the action scene was effective. The strange people just popping up and singing, followed by Malfoy choking was creepy. The box exploding and the cursed balls were scary sounding, too. I had wondered why Snape didn't help corral them but between being choked and taking care of injured students, he probably didn't have a chance.

    Author's Response: Thanks for giving feed-back. The chapter seems to have worked out okay then - I'm relieved to hear it.

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