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Reviews For For the Greater Good
Why did it take me the whole summer? >:( Fuckin ladybugs... they scare me. Fuckin Malfoy... he's annoying. Fuckin Aryna... the snitch. Fuckin Hermione... sneaking around, digging her nose into stuff she isn't grown up to. Fuckin Death Eaters... for being themselves. Fuckin Dark Lord... for his existence. Fuckin Dumbledore... and his black-white thinking. Fuckin story... going from evil to worse. Sorry, Elv... Insult non intended. :I
and teh story gets more, nad more interesting... Author's Response: Thanks! Yes, the next chapters will definitely clear some things up.
My favourite part in this chapter, however, is the conversation and the closeness between Snape and Harry and particularly the tale about how Dumbledore got rid of Snape’s pets and how Snape retaliated by burning down Dumbledore’s stable, but saved the horses without letting Dumbledore know. That says so much about their relationship. Brilliant. I believe there are several stories in your story: there is the direct, action-ridden plot and there is the very interesting ”psychoanalytical” saga about fathers and sons (or parents and children). Dumbledore sees something of his lost son in Snape and wants a new chance to be a good father, determined not to repeat his earlier mistake when he ignored the signs of evilness in his son, therefore projecting the son’s evil character on Snape, overcompensating with sternness and thus treating Snape with cruelty. That is the challenge for all parents - to see your child as a unique individual and not a copy of yourself or of someone else that you have a history with. You need to avoid projecting your own feelings, wishes and dreads on your children and sort of just observe them, lovingly, unbiassed and with curiosity and let them develop their own traits. Guide them, of course, but not read things into them that are not there… Thanks for illustrating that in such an interesting way. Author's Response: I’m glad you liked the conversation between Harry and Snape. That scene was the hardest to write. I had originally written pages and pages of endless conversation and editing it so that the most important parts stood out was difficult. You really did understand the dynamic of Snape and Dumbledore’s relationship. Your comments sound exactly like my character analysis. Most readers believe that Dumbledore is simply a psychopath and I was worried that I hadn’t managed to convey the complexity of their relationship, how his love for Snape and for Tyrus are tangled together. He does love Severus like a son but he is afraid. The image of his dead sons does not leave his mind, fear blinds him to the good within Severus. A major theme in this story is about the relationships between parents and children. The main one I’m exploring is, of course, that between Snape and Harry but there are others such as Snape and Dumbledore, Harry and James and, later on, the Malfoys. I’m very glad you’re enjoying the ‘psychoanalytical’ side of the story. This is the first novel length story I’m writing and I hope that it will help me improve my writing style and technique. Because I’m always looking to improve, I see a lot of flaws in my work. Sometimes, after I’ve spent a lot of time staring at the chapters, not knowing how to edit (editing is always the hardest part), all I see are flaws. Reviews like yours help me see that I’m doing something right and it gives me the strength to continue writing. You understood what I was trying to convey through my words and that is simply fantastic! So, I just want to say thank you for your incredibly perceptive review. |
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