Reviews For A Christmas Gamble: Burning Down the Workshop
I would have liked to see a little more detail on the reveal to Dumbledore. I wanted to see his reaction. Perhaps just:
"– however did you know?"
"I am Father Christmas."
Harry stared at Snape in surprise.
Dumbledore smiled. "Of course you must seem so to Harry in his moment of need, though I am surprised to see you embrace such sentimentality. I would like to know, however, how you knew to rescue him."
"I mean it. I am Father Christmas. Literally. Potter is my assistant. I found him bruised and locked in a cupboard when I went to fetch him for our Christmas Eve duties."
"Severus? Are you feeling all right?"
"No, Headmaster," said Snape with impatience. "We have just returned from delivering hundreds of presents on a sleigh pulled by reindeer. We are both extremely tired and would like nothing more than to go home for Christmas."
Dumbledore looked a little green around the eyes. He looked at Harry, who glanced at Snape before replying. "It's true, Sir. We've been working together since last Christmas."
Dumbledore sat back and, with an apparent effort, managed to summon up a small twinkle. "Well then, I suggest you tell me the whole story."
Oh, and please can we have a sequel where Harry is forced to take Veritaserum and asked questions about Snape's 'other job'? It can be an attempt to reveal Snape's loyalties as a spy or for some other reason, but Harry's talk of Snape being Father Christmas leads everyone to conclude that the Veritaserum isn't working and so the secret they are trying to get Harry to reveal is safe.
Author's Response: Haha, I love your version of the conversation! Yes, more detail would have been better, I agree. Oh wow - I do love that idea with Harry having to answer questions! That's a brilliant idea for a follow-up, haha! I probably won't have the time to write it though these days, I confess. Thanks for the detailed review!
Author's Response: I'm so glad you enjoyed them, etherian! Apologies for a slow response to reviews (University keeps be way too busy). And oh my, as for my original work: the novel is going slow. Thanks for asking! I've had good feedback from a number of people, but it's not nearly ready for submission. I don't like the first 1/3, but the final 2/3 I'm happy with, so revisions revisions revisions! I did get a short story published however - "The Pivotal Moment" in Chicken Soup for the Soul: Think Positive. I wrote it on a bit of a lark, so it knocked my socks off they wanted it. Thanks again for your curiosity! - Cheers from Whitetail!
Author's Response: Why thank you! I find boatloads of tea really helps with the imagination department, haha! Great to hear you are enjoying it, and thank you for the kind words. :)
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