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Reviews For Unexpected Truce
Author's Response: Thank you. I'm glad that you are enjoying the story. I hope that my mistakes won't discourage you from continuing with the story
There is a recurrent problem with the verb-tenses: "The chair looked (past) uneasy.., but she found (past) that it gives (present) her back...." present should be past tense. It is much easier to read a sentence when the tenses match all the way. Please check the tense-rules. To help, try William Strunk and E. B. White's :'The Elements of Style'. It is a small pearl, pocket-sized, about the rules of usage, principles of composition, form, use of words, and brief notes on style. It will help you,because you write with imagination, but the verbs, jangling, catapult the reader out of the story's universe. Good luck, and happiness with the work.
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