Fascinating! I like your Hermione and their apparent comfort with Snape.
That was easy. If Harry fell for that so easily, maybe he wasn't meant to be a Slytherin after all.
I enjoy the plot. It is all a little creepy. Nice touch to have Hermione nearly sorted into Slytherin - I gather that it is a hint of what is to come (I'm reading this for the second time)
Author's Response: Thanks. If ever I get the energy to work more on it, I will expand it and build on it, rather than lengthen the story itself, but there are some interesting possiblities.
Author's Response: Thanks. If ever I get the energy to work more on it, I will expand it and build on it, rather than lengthen the story itself, but there are some interesting possiblities.
Woah! I was NOT expecting the ending of this chapter - having Snape there suddenly! Nice! Interesting that Hermione was almost put in Slytherin too, well she DOES have ambition! :) good chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you. Perhaps eventually, I will work on the story and give it more substance, but it helped me enormously to overcome my writer's block,w hich was the purpose. I would like to improve the plot and build the chapters up eventually, but one thing at a time, right?
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