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Reviews For Double Vision
Author's Response: Yeah, thought that would be an added twist. lol
Author's Response: Hee hee. Love danger.
Author's Response: I will add to the chapter. Like I said, I did a quick job to force myself to get back in to the groove, but I promise that I will do your challenge justice.
Author's Response: that is part of the mystery. lol One day, I will write more explanations.
Author's Response: Thank you. I do want to eventually build on this story more and improve it, because it is such an awesome challenge.
Author's Response: Thank you. I know that it's short, but did that on purpose to not get too overwhelmed, but get back into the groove.
Author's Response: Thank you. Perhaps eventually, I will work on the story and give it more substance, but it helped me enormously to overcome my writer's block,w hich was the purpose. I would like to improve the plot and build the chapters up eventually, but one thing at a time, right?
Author's Response: Thanks, very short chapters I know, and I would have liked to done more with the story, since I loved your challenge, but as it has been so long since I've written anything, I did very short chapters on purpose, to myself in the groove, but not get overwhelmed.
How did Bellatrix and Severus become a couple? Did she ever marry LeStrange? Did Severus ever get over Lily? Was this a marriage of love or convenience? Did James and Lily know? How did Hermione's parents react? They raised her for 13 years. I would assume they would still want to be in her life. How did Sirius react? Remus? Ron? How did Voldemort rise again? How exactly did they defeat Voldemort? What was the potion? I had assumed it was some type of blood adoption potion. How did Voldemort find out their true identities? A suggestion to make it easier to read: instead of having 10 chapters that are 150 to 400 words each, have it be a one-shot. At max, it should be 2 chapters of about 1,500 words. One more thing: It's not "Wormwood". It's Wormtail. Author's Response: OOps, I will change that. It was just meant to get me back into writing, and I just wanted short, mini chapters, for it to not feel to overwhelming, but I still needed the break to set up the chain of events. Hee hee. Wormwood. where the heck did I get that from. lol. Oh, wait. Matilda! That must be where. lol |
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