Potions and Snitches
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Reviews For Double Vision
Title: Chills 17 Mar 2015 11:16 am
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh? Are they really their children?! Oh my!

    Author's Response: Yeah, thought that would be an added twist. lol
Title: The Plot 17 Mar 2015 11:15 am
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    Ouuuuu, danger and the plot thickens!

    Author's Response: Hee hee. Love danger.
Title: Understanding 17 Mar 2015 11:14 am
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    Hehehe, of course SNape is enjoying this! Sad that this chapter was so short!

    Author's Response: I will add to the chapter. Like I said, I did a quick job to force myself to get back in to the groove, but I promise that I will do your challenge justice.
Title: The Horror! 17 Mar 2015 11:13 am
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    I like the development, but where did Snape come from? What does Hermione look like? Bella?
Title: Reflections 17 Mar 2015 11:11 am
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    Hehehe. But what, exactly did Snape do to them? What happened?

    Author's Response:

    that is part of the mystery. lol

    One day, I will write more explanations. 

Title: Caught! 17 Mar 2015 11:09 am
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    Ouuuu, I wonder what Snape is going to do next. Great emotions and drama in this short chapter.

    Author's Response: Thank you. I do want to eventually build on this story more and improve it, because it is such an awesome challenge.
Title: The Plan 17 Mar 2015 11:05 am
Reviewer: rosina (Signed) [Report This]
    Well done for beating The Block! Short chapter, but you've already captured my interest. Sadly as my computer is on a real go-slow and I have to get to work I'll have to come back later to find out what's happening.

    Author's Response: Thank you. I know that it's short, but did that on purpose to not get too overwhelmed, but get back into the groove.
Title: Stealth 17 Mar 2015 10:55 am
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    Woah! I was NOT expecting the ending of this chapter - having Snape there suddenly! Nice! Interesting that Hermione was almost put in Slytherin too, well she DOES have ambition! :) good chapter.

    Author's Response: Thank you. Perhaps eventually, I will work on the story and give it more substance, but it helped me enormously to overcome my writer's block,w hich was the purpose. I would like to improve the plot and build the chapters up eventually, but one thing at a time, right?
Title: The Plan 17 Mar 2015 4:05 am
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    Yes!!!! Someone responded to the challenge! Hehe, I wonder what Snape and Bella have in plan for the two. I like how this is structured as setting up a revenge. Delicious beginning.

    Author's Response: Thanks, very short chapters I know, and I would have liked to done more with the story, since I loved your challenge, but as it has been so long since I've written anything, I did very short chapters on purpose, to myself in the groove, but not get overwhelmed.
Title: Epilogue 17 Mar 2015 2:37 am
Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) [Report This]
    That was an interesting story. You've got a good beginning. I would've liked more background and more detail.

    How did Bellatrix and Severus become a couple? Did she ever marry LeStrange? Did Severus ever get over Lily? Was this a marriage of love or convenience?

    Did James and Lily know? How did Hermione's parents react? They raised her for 13 years. I would assume they would still want to be in her life. How did Sirius react? Remus? Ron?

    How did Voldemort rise again? How exactly did they defeat Voldemort? What was the potion? I had assumed it was some type of blood adoption potion. How did Voldemort find out their true identities?

    A suggestion to make it easier to read: instead of having 10 chapters that are 150 to 400 words each, have it be a one-shot. At max, it should be 2 chapters of about 1,500 words.

    One more thing: It's not "Wormwood". It's Wormtail.

    Author's Response:

    OOps, I will change that.

    It was just meant to get me back into writing, and I just wanted short, mini chapters, for it to not  feel to overwhelming, but I still needed the break to set up the chain of events. Hee hee.  Wormwood. where the heck did I get that from. lol. Oh, wait. Matilda! That must be where. lol 


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