| Title: A Thousand Photographs
| 31 Mar 2015 11:13 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Thank you lovely
Piece of writing
Ooh, I like this one. The second person works quite well, and I like how you've spun the idea of the photograph together from start to finish. I feel like this first chapter could be a one shot all itself. One little critique - some of the sentences do run on for quite a time and appear to go in a bit of a rush without much punctuation. While it may be a stylistic choice, it was a bit tough to make sense of in places. Other than that, I really like this chapter. I think it's one of the best second persons I've seen! Keep in mind that I would not give critiques unless I felt that the writer in question showed promise, as I definitely think you do!
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