| Title: Dinner at the Dursleys'
| 04 Mar 2016 5:31 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Very good chapter I like it that Severus is still feeling antagonistic to Harry
| Title: Dinner at the Dursleys'
| 03 Mar 2016 11:25 pm
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| Reviewer: lunaz (Anonymous)
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Good story but wow this Snape is stupid. Looking forward to the next chapter.
| Title: Dinner at the Dursleys'
| 03 Mar 2016 10:16 pm
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| Reviewer: nnjjj (Anonymous)
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Wow, that had me at the edge of my seat the whole time. I loved the garden scene with Severus pacing as well as the dinner scene when Harry was serving everyone. Great job!
You keep Snape well in character and his reaction is believable. He is starting to question how Harry is being treated in the back of his mind but still unable to let go of his pre-made notions and is just the prickly and stern man he always is. I could see him coming to the conclusion that Harry is not treated right or maybe not given the appropriate consequences for her actions at her aunt and uncle's house and maybe having her live with him, but still thinking that she is a mischievous, spoiled brat.
I just love this story and I look forward to the next chapter.
I'm a bit surprised Snape is still being so terrible to Harry despite the fact that the poor kid is now a girl, and looks nothing like James Potter anymore. From the description, it sure sounds like she looks a lot like him!
HAHA, I laughed at how Petunia kept screeching about her daisies. I hope Snape Hexes Vernon soon. He's revolting.
Author's Response: Well, while seeing a James clone was awful for him, Harry's new face is producing a bad reaction as well because it's an uncomfortable reminder of an uncomfortable truth that he is denying.
Looking forward to Harry and Severus's discussion, in the next chapter!
I know it's morally ambiguous, but why not just use Occlumency on the girl? It would answer a lot of questions Snape has... emotionally hurt her (a good thing in his mind) and stop all this blatant lying that she apparently needs to be cured of. Then again, he'll only be looking for things that he wants to see, so that could blind him to a LOT of details. Oh well, it's not like Harry hasn't been trying her best the entire time anyway, so she's used to this. Though, she's going to have some new nightmares from this encounter.
As evil as Petunia seems, I love the attitude she takes with her flowers it was hilarious..... I loved the tense angsty chapter between snape and harry
| Title: Unmasked
| 01 Mar 2016 9:47 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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A lot of selfish adults here! Thank you a great chapter
Oh gosh, my heart broke for Harry AND Snape, surprisingly. Lily really did mess that up pretty damn well, didn't she? I'm kind of disgusted with James for what he did to that poor child, and I'm surprised Severus didn't react more to THAT aspect either, as well as the fact that he kept Lily prisoner for basically the length of a year.
I like how Sev's first reaction is "ABORT ABORT" and running away. Very realistic for someone who's world has been shaken to it's core.
Poor Harry, oh (or Harriet, should I say!). There aren't words to say how bad I feel bad for her.
Author's Response: Well, Severus is still in denial so he refuses to accept what happened to Lily as fact as well right now :)
| Title: Unmasked
| 29 Feb 2016 10:06 pm
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| Reviewer: nnjjj (Anonymous)
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Great job again on this one. I think your story is both original and well written. I can't wait to see what is going to happen next between Snape and Harry.
If there was something I would say I don't like I would say that you skipped ahead in time quite a few times, but I understand that you have a timeline to your plot. I wish and hope though that we are able to slow down the pace a bit now and get Snape and Harry a chance to get to know each other, and I so look forward to what interactions you have planned. I think there is a lot of potential emotions and situations that could come up between them and I hope you take your time for a good amount of angst they need to work through and not make them best friends over night. I like the strict and stern potions master mixed with a bit a protectiveness as he makes sure she eats her veggies and drink her milk type of thing. Thanks for sharing this story with us.
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