Reviews For Growing Powerful
Author's Response: He's a wizard so I think his magical core would heal him faster after exercising. He is very determined to beat Voldemort, that's mostly why he sleeps less, but Dobby's Wideye potions are also helping him.
I think some back story would be helpful here. Like: Who decided that Harry needed extra training? Is Harry going home to the Dursley home or staying somewhere else while he is training? What does he think of his new
schedule? Maybe you have this in the next chapter and I am just getting ahead of things, but I thought I would make the suggestion.
I always admire people who have the courage to write a story in a language that isn't their own. You are doing a good job with it.
Author's Response: Moody and Snape *have* to get along because Dumbledore told them that Harry must be trained. You know how it goess with Dumbledore, one can't just start arguing with him about something he already decided :D he always has too good reasoning. Harry is staying at Grimmauld Place since his training takes place there. Thank you :) I'm really afraid sometimes that my grammar is incorrect, but I'm trying to correct it.
Umbridge was much more annoying in the book, she didn't seem to want to allow Dumbledore any authority that first night. Her part missing from this chapter seems to suggest that her character is different.
Cloak is spelled cloak. :) I noticed it was spelled wrong as cloack a few times.
Your Harry is compelling, I like that he seems more capable than the canon book Harry.
I wish that the writing had more descriptions. The scene feels empty and blank. It makes it hard to get sucked into the story and see what the environment is like.
Author's Response: At http://harrypotter.wikia.com/wiki/Fifth_year they wrote that fifth years had 6 class periods, that's why I wrote it. Umbridge's character isn't really different, I just don't want to mention her :D I'll correct it I promise :) Oh, yes, I have been looking for spelling mistakes for hours and I thought I didn't have any more... I always mess cloak up. :) I'll write more decriptions then. I've noticed how chapters in other fanfics were much longer, but I didn't know how to make mines longer. I'll correct that, too. :)
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