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Reviews For Growing Powerful
Author's Response: He's a wizard so I think his magical core would heal him faster after exercising. He is very determined to beat Voldemort, that's mostly why he sleeps less, but Dobby's Wideye potions are also helping him.
Umbridge was much more annoying in the book, she didn't seem to want to allow Dumbledore any authority that first night. Her part missing from this chapter seems to suggest that her character is different. Cloak is spelled cloak. :) I noticed it was spelled wrong as cloack a few times. Your Harry is compelling, I like that he seems more capable than the canon book Harry. I wish that the writing had more descriptions. The scene feels empty and blank. It makes it hard to get sucked into the story and see what the environment is like. Author's Response: At http://harrypotter.wikia.com/wiki/Fifth_year they wrote that fifth years had 6 class periods, that's why I wrote it. Umbridge's character isn't really different, I just don't want to mention her :D I'll correct it I promise :) Oh, yes, I have been looking for spelling mistakes for hours and I thought I didn't have any more... I always mess cloak up. :) I'll write more decriptions then. I've noticed how chapters in other fanfics were much longer, but I didn't know how to make mines longer. I'll correct that, too. :) |
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