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Title: Chapter 1 Something's Not Right 22 Aug 2016 11:56 pm
Reviewer: The Lonely God With A Box (Signed) [Report This]
    Hey, great start on your story!
    Just a couple small notes. Your chapter was mostly in the past tense, but occasionally you switched into present tense. Also, direct address is always set off by commas. I noticed a few times where those commas were missing.
    I get the feeling that it's a bit rushed. That will come with time and practice, but it feels like it deserves more time than you're giving it.
    Keep up the writing!

    Author's Response: Thanks for the advice, I'll be sure to keep that in mind for future chapters xx

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