Wonderful and very sweet chapter. I love the scared cat and his kind comforting caretaker.
I wonder what tipped Harry off that the cat was Snape? Harry may dislike Severus but he wouldn't harm him, especially when Snape is in the form of an injured cat. Severus really doesn't know much about Harry, if he believes Potter will harm him.
| Title: Chapter 2: Pain
| 27 Aug 2016 6:38 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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I love it! especially the ending! Thank you so much
Yes!!!! Now write to Dumbledork!!!!
I cannot wait to see what happens!
Snape has a bad time with dogs in general, what with Fluffy and Padfoot
I love a vulnerable Snape and a caring Harry, something about it is like a throwback to what I think Lily and Snape were like as innocent kids
I like this so far. There are some nice details, and it makes a change for Harry to be the one looking after Snape. English may not be your first language, but the story is easy enough to read. There was just the one sentence that really stood out as needing correction - 'It catched the black cat and bite his leg' should read 'It caught the black cat and bit his leg'. I look forward to seeing how things progress now that Snape's secret is out.
Author's Response: Thank you, I've just corrected it.
I liked it. :) Poor little cat Snape! Harry is being so attentive to him and his wounds. I love how Snape softened towards Harry, and how Harry confided in his little cat friend. Of course, it must be a shock when Harry realized that it was Snape!
I noticed that a lot of your quotations are missing end punction. For example:
"...I hope someone could see that I’m not my father”
“So, you are an animagus” Harry continued.
They should be written as such:
"...I hope someone could see that I’m not my father.”
“So, you are an animagus,” Harry continued.
Otherwise the writing was good. :) I'm interested to see what happens next. PLease continue!
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