| Title: Chapter 1
| 20 Jun 2017 8:46 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Thank you, I like the idea of Harry running a commune
I really like your beginning. You have me wondering - what happened to Severus? Harry's friends are still with him, at least, and he has his farm. I like the idea of Harry with a farm. Two little corrections - you wrote 'the pale of fresh milk - the word is pail. Also, in 'Penny had tossed her tale,'
it should be tail. Otherwise it's a neat starting chapter and I am looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Thanks for the typo corrections! I'll fix them asap!
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