Wow, this is your first time writing fan fiction? I wish I wrote this well for my first fan fiction. Hell, I wish a write this well now. XD
Anyway, this is really good so far and you've avoided a lot of the awkward explanations a lot of new writers tend to do. Have you written before? Something other than fan fics?
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the encouraging review! To answer your question, I haven't written before outside of school papers, but I've been wanting to try for a bit. I've been working at this story for a while now but was nervous to post it so I'm really glad you're enjoying it!!
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| 11 Nov 2017 7:25 pm
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| Reviewer: Biggi15 (Signed)
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Thanks for sharing this, it´s written very well, interesting development and I can´t wait to read more of your story.
| Title: Chapter 1: Unfortunate News
| 11 Nov 2017 9:15 am
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| Reviewer: Shellie (Signed)
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My only advice to you is write faster. I can't believe this is your first try at writing. Both characters are very believable as you have written them. I look forward to reading more of this story.
Interesting to see a fic where Harry really does act the way Severus perceives him to be!
I kinda wanted to slug Harry when he said, "And it's not like muggles can really understand just how important I am." Even if he was saying it as part of his mask, that's just obnoxious.
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