| Title: Chapter 4
| 29 Aug 2019 8:58 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Very good reasoning about the Dursley’s behaviour and how Harry is aware of it being abnormal. I think the fact that she has the name Evans is a bit of a give away apart from the green eyes! Glad the mystery of the letter and rushing away is now cleared up!
Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, the clue is very obvious ... for those who know it is a story and coincidences are not likely to happen.
The bit with the letter was shamelessly stolen from a Jane Austen novel. ^^
Something tells me this secret about snape having a child isn’t going to stay a secret very soon :) . Another great chapter! And the gang is back at Hogwarts now, where things are about to get interesting I’m sure!
Author's Response: You guessed right! Things are moving now, and he won't be able to keep his secrets. And yes, things definitely get interesting. Thank you!
Harry is so clueless, I love it. Fantastic chapter, it had me grinning. I loved all the little details. The only thing that stood out was that Rose wasn't startled when Harry spoke Parseltongue. Either it's a mistake, or her familiarity with the snake language needs to be explained some more. I loved that Snape bought them all ice cream, and slipped up when Harry called him out about not hating him. I really feel like Snape is trying to watch out for Harry, warn him of things in his best interest. Fantastic story and chapter! I'm really loving it so far. Please update when you can.
Author's Response: I imagined Rose to be distracted with the raven, still. Snake noises coming out of a pet shop wouldn't have caught her attention. Snape taught her that parseltongue exists and she doesn't have prejudices against people who can use it, so she is pretty much unfazed when she finds out via Snape's scolding. (Now that you mention it, though, perhaps she should have asked more questions, as one would upon finding out a friend has an amazing skill. I figure she didn't want to risk anyone overhearing her.)
Thank you for commenting!
“We aren’t in a book” - I laughed out loud. Harry’s breaking the fourth wall there. Another great chapter! I’m dying to know if Rose is in fact related to Harry or if this is some little trick your trying to play with the reader. Thank you for updating!
Author's Response: More will be revealed in the next chapter! But of course I'm not telling you if it is a trick or not. ;)
Thank you!
Brilliant chapter! As soon as I saw the name Rose Evans I was like “hmmmm...interesting” ahaha! And when she began telling them that she was fostered I was just waiting with anticipation for the moment snape arrived! I’m really loving this. I’m interested to see how your character Rose will play a roll in this story- as well as towards the dynamics between Harry and snape!
Author's Response: Thank you!
Hey, Evans isn't that rare a name, it could be someone totally unrelated. ^^
Ahhh I love it. Rose must be related to Harry! Ahh! Great development. For an original character, I thought she was alright, a little bit insecure, maybe a little bit blank. I would of liked to know more details about her, some quirks in her appearance, a habit that made her seem more real. She kind of feels like a plot device so far, but an intriguing one. I hope to learn more about her. I loved the awkwardness of meeting Snape at the museum. I’m really enjoying this story so far and would love to know what happens next.
Author's Response: Oh no, poor Rose, I never wanted her to be a mere plot device. :( I hope you feel she's more rounded as a person in next chapter. Thanks for your comment!
| Title: Chapter 3
| 19 Aug 2019 7:49 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Lovely chapter, I liked the fact that he went with Hermione not Ron, nothing against the Weasleys but nice for a change to get to know hermione’s background. Thank you for updating
Author's Response: Thank you! I feel like the Grangers don't get enough time in the book. Rowling apparently thinks dentists are boring, but I think it is good for Harry to meet a muggle family who isn't at all like the Dursleys. Harry can explain away the Weasleys being so much nicer to him with his celebrity status or their magic, but the Dursleys have zero excuses for not being more like the Grangers.
I’m loving this. Harry hardly ever gets to spend time with Hermione’s family in most fanfics. Great original twist! Funny that Hermione’s parents trust her so much as to let her share a room with a boy. Haha but it IS Hermione after all. I bet Snape is on the boat. Dumbledore would never let Harry be away from magical protection for long. Or maybe this is Snape’s ideas? I can’t wait to find out. Thanks for the update!
Author's Response: Exactly, she's Hermione. She's so sensible her parents sometimes wish she got up to more mischief, because when Harry first meets her, she's a bit like a small adult, which her parents feel just isn't healthy. (They don't know she set a teacher on fire in her first year and brewed an illegal potion in second, of course.)
I suppose some parents of sensible daughters might distrust the boy in this scenario, but Harry is a sweet and polite child (rather moreso than Ron) and the Grangers know perfectly well that, since Hermione trusts him, she's likely been alone with him at some point in time, anyway.
Snape has a completely unrelated reason to be on the boat, which will be revealed in the next chapter. But it's well possible he decided to keep an eye on Harry while he's there.
| Title: Chapter 2
| 17 Aug 2019 4:47 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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I’m rather torn, I’d love more of this story but I hope it can be finished as it is so good.
I love Harry’s innocence about what is normal and I think you have got it right he doesn’t understand and that is heartbreaking. I think Hermione was talking to Severus about his home life, I’d love to see what he does about that. Thank you for a great story
Author's Response: Thank you! I will do my best to actually finish the story!
| Title: Chapter 1
| 16 Aug 2019 9:58 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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I was not sure about the themes of this story but I think it might be good fun so thank you
Author's Response: Thank you! I totally get why you weren't sure, but I hope you'll still like it. I don't tend to go much into detail with horrible things.
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