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Reviews For Ridiculous Pseudonym Phase
Author's Response: More Albus vs. Muggle world in the way!
Author's Response: Our dearest Potions Professor will endeavor to get some sense into him, don't worry :)
Author's Response: Thanks! Hope you'll like it
-The language and action is very good, though I think the organization/pacing of some previous chapters can be improved. -The grammar issue I'm noticing the most is the constant jump between past and present tense. Do you still need a beta? Author's Response: Yes, are you interested?
Now I wonder ... is the Leukemia even real? Author's Response: Err... spoilers ;)
I can't wait to see how that will turn out. Since you mentioned needing a beta: I'm not a native speaker, so can't help you with your English grammar, but I am pretty sure that the British don't celebrate Thanksgiving, since it was invented in the US. A Christmas dinner would make more sense to me in that context. Author's Response: Thank you! I'll fix it As for the letter, you'll understand everything soon enough :)
Author's Response: A new update comes every day or two, stay tuned
Author's Response: Snape's dreams are usually ambiguous in the beginning, we'll work this one out in the following chapters |
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