I wonder what happened to Luna? Looking forward to finding out.
Death Eaters that close to Headquarters is a bad sign. They were lucky to get the kids in safely. Harry must be happy to have his friends there. Snape may be watching out for him but he isn't the most chatty company.
The Southern Raiders are an interesting addition. I liked having Remus turn up, too. It was good for Harry to have someone to talk to.
This a fantastic story so far. It is starting off as a really promising story. I really enjoyed it. I'm super excited to read more.
Little concerned about a the Mary Sue though. It could also use some small minor edits, like the fight with Bellatrix, Harry, Kingsley and the now known 4th person last chapter. I didnt even realize there was a 4th person. This would explain my confused comment last chapter about Kingsley.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review! I wasn't sure what you meant at first, but after rereading a couple of times I agree it needed some editing. I hope this has made it somewhat less confusing ;)
| Title: Chapter 7 The Hogwarts Express
| 08 Aug 2020 2:58 am
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| Reviewer: Synfidie (Signed)
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I'll have a fuller comment next chapter, but why did you make it like Harry had never net Kingsley befo r e? You made the description all mysterious of this person..but he's been introduced before.
| Title: Chapter 8 Welcome Back
| 07 Aug 2020 9:49 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Thank you an excellent chapter
I’m hooked and looking forward to more.
| Title: Chapter 7 The Hogwarts Express
| 04 Aug 2020 8:29 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Very good chapter but where were the adults?
And we're off. It's going to be a bumpy ride.
Hmm. I wonder where the other Wealeys are? Mrs. Weasley seems reluctant to have Harry there. Looking forward to finding out why.
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