Another great chapter! I’m excited to see Harry be rescued lmao
Few suggestions for the rescue: "my father will hear about that", founders, Hogwarts a history, worst case of actions is Gryffindors caught red-handed bullying H
Author's Response: Good ideas! Lucius will definitely be a part of it (I may have a bit of an obsession with the Malfoys) and I've been toying with the idea of the Gryffindors being caught but im not sure how far to go with it. The hgwarts history is a really good suggestion tho i might just use that !
I loved this chapter so so so much! I can’t wait to see what happens next! I imagine that Ron will be a jerk, but Harry may find a friend in Neville. I wonder if Snape will be nasty now that Harry is in Gryffindor? Anywho, awesome chapter!
I LOVE THIS SO MUCH AAAAAAA
| Title: Plucked from the Nest
| 07 May 2021 8:49 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Thank you for updating your excellent story. I love your defensive shy Harry who will stand up for his friends
I didn’t notice any awkwardness to your action scene at all. Your descriptions are excellent and well above the average writer. They flow and add to the narrative.
| Title: Plucked from the Nest
| 06 May 2021 12:27 am
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| Reviewer: Shellie (Signed)
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I don't think there is anything wrong with your story. I feel bad you are moving poor Harry, but that IS part of the plot. LOL I think you should not be so hard on yourself. Looking forward to the next part.
Author's Response: ahh thank you! the next chapter is going to be a short one so (hopefully) it'll be out soon !
Thanks for another great chapter. I hope Snape can figure out how to get Harry safely back into the safety of Slytherin before the Gryffindors do too much damage.
Great first chapter. I love all the detail you included, which made Harry’s comfort in Slytherin so tangible.
Author's Response: im glad! i was worried there was too much unnecessary detail so I'm happy you thought it helped the story
awesome second chapter!! Everyone is so unfair, poor Harry
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