An interesting fic!
Snape's hypocrisy is getting to me, though. Not just the fact that he was hopping in and out... and in and out... and in and out ... and in and out of beds and then accusing Jasmine of "being a bed hopping slut," (Howdy there, Kettle!) but then acting like she was a terrible parent and (and even thinking to himself "Who abandons their child?") when he was literally the one who did everything he could to avoid having to take care of his child. That's not abandonment, then? Calling Jasmine a liar and burning her letters instead of just making a paternity test potion?
But now that the Holly isn't dangerously dependent--now that she can feed herself and doesn't need nappies changed and is no longer at an age where she might get a childhood fever that turns into a seizure, now that she isn't waking her single parent up 10x a night and she can look after herself to some extent, NOW he wants to be a dad. Didn't want to be one when it was difficult, though.
Author's Response: Hello, thanks for the review. That's quite a comprehensive analysis of Snape's hypocrisy and I'm afraid to say more will come. So you'll have to put up with it a little longer before things settle
| Title: Grasp The Nettle
| 18 Oct 2021 7:21 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Fantastic chapter! You are cleverly bringing the webs of the story together and the tension is rising to screaming pitch, thank you so much.
Hm, Severus is a Slytherin. Can he get over his undeserved Harry hate to see that HARRY is his key to his daughter? Be the one to give her back her brother and he will have made a huge stride in her eyes.
Always glad to see an update. Another excellent chapter
Terrific chapter! I simply love this story.
I'm seriously loving this story so far, your writing is so good! I feel so bad for both Holly and Severus though; their relationship is so strained and, well, broken. I just hope that they'll eventually be able to amend it together- with Harry as an addition as well.
Oh, it's so weird though you know? I'm not saying it's like bad or anything, but like; yeah, kinda bad. Scrambled, in a way, I guess. There's just so many secrets, so many things that would make me scratch my head.
The irony is so hilarious though; Lucius knows it.
I can't wait to see how Harry and Holly might see each other again and how things progress further into the story. Anticipating your future updates!
Really enjoying this and looking forward to more.
I LOVE this chapter. It os great, your style of writting is just magnificent. I hope you continue soon.
| Title: That Old Chestnut
| 06 Oct 2021 8:42 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Oh dear! I feel the quotation “Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we start to deceive” sums up the actions of Dumbledore here.
Very good chapter I loved Narcissa’s rant.
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