There’s a line that says the student who used the crucio was sent to the death eaters? I’m confused about that. It would be helpful to show more context and background for the characters and settings. Thanks for updating.
Author's Response: It's wizarding law. He was basically sent to Azkaban.
It’s a good opportunity to learn more about each other.
Author's Response: Oooh!
I like how you’ve included other wizarding schools outside the norm. It would be interesting to learn what countries they’re from.
Author's Response: Oki.
Interesting set up. I’m looking forward to learning more about where they are and the general circumstances they’re in.
Author's Response: I hope you like it.
Awww, they both have troubles. These chapters are extremely short. I'd suggest adding three chapters together to make one chapter as your writing develops.
Author's Response: Got it.
Yay of course Harry won. What does Draco want to talk about?
Author's Response: you'll see.
| Title: Nightmares and Murmurs.
| 03 Nov 2022 5:27 pm
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| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed)
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Nice setup. I would love to read more. Where did they travel to? Is it two participants of a certain age? Like 6th year and up? How old are Harry and Draco?
One mistake:
He and Malfoy left each other well oalon in the room
alone
Author's Response: Draco would have. So would Harry. This is already awkward, they wouldn't want to make it worse. Also, the only reason Draco bullied Harry in the books was because his father wanted him to. He did whatever his father said, and anyone could write to Draco's father. Owls always know where to go. Further, no one is here to see what's going on, so he doesn't need to.
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