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Title: The Truth 03 Nov 2022 2:33 pm
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    Good start! It's totally in character that Harry isn't reading the newspaper articles. He will be so shocked though at this news being true. How will he take it?

    The only improvement I can suggest is to watch and make sure all the names are capitalized. You had a harry in there instead of Harry, and professor Snape instead of Professor Snape. The chapters are short, but that is okay when stories are updated quickly. It would be nice to have more details given as well.

    Thanks for writing and sharing this new story! I'm really enjoying it. I'd love to read more!

    Author's Response: Thank you for the constructive criticism. I like this site, because the authors on here are so polite about it.
Title: The Truth 28 Oct 2022 8:04 am
Reviewer: DesertPlanet (Signed) [Report This]
    This has a lot of potential, but just not a lot of detail. You have the potential to tell a good story, so tell it. Suck the readers in. Give them details to focus on and mull over.

    Formatting can come later, but for now, try to become more expansive in your writing. Tell the story you want to tell and you want people to remember.

    Author's Response: Thanks!

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