AAh, great chapter break! Both your beginnings and endings to chapters are excellent. You know exactly how to draw us in. I love your dialogue and Harry's inner thoughts. Some stories tend to be too much in the protagonists head, but yours isn't. It's nice and pacey and you trust your reader enough not to explain everything - that's great writing! I'm very much looking forward to more. Thanks for sharing your story!
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