This sequence was brilliant - especially the last line of the chapter. I’m so looking forward to reading on!
This is terrific! I’m so glad that Snape knows when to hold the snark.
This is great! I'm so looking forward to updates
Lol, I found this funny and clever:
"If Snape could still take the time to be a prat, things couldn’t be too awful."
Thank you for your kind comment on my investigatory skills in finding Chapter 1. :) Being called a beautiful human being made my day
| Title: Chapter 4
| 02 Jun 2023 11:39 am
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| Reviewer: Vee (Signed)
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AAh, great chapter break! Both your beginnings and endings to chapters are excellent. You know exactly how to draw us in. I love your dialogue and Harry's inner thoughts. Some stories tend to be too much in the protagonists head, but yours isn't. It's nice and pacey and you trust your reader enough not to explain everything - that's great writing!
I'm very much looking forward to more. Thanks for sharing your story!
Riveting start to your story! I love your writing style, and am looking forward to reading on.
| Title: Chapter 2
| 30 May 2023 4:48 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Very unusual and excellent start to the story. I hope Severus has some drinks in his bag Harry is going to be very dehydrated soon.
What a fabulous start!!!
I love any and every “Snape kidnap/Runs away with Harry” and you seem on top of it!
Can’t wait for more!!!
Author's Response: That is also one of my favorite tropes, as you can probably see, lol! Thanks for reviewing!
I guess that's a printing option: but I can view and read it fine.
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