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Reviews For Dear Diary: The Freak Under the Stairs
Nicely written angst.
BRO I DONT EVEN LIKE. KNOW WHAT TO SAY LMAO
This is great! I love the way you have Harry internalize his external world.
I love the way the diary isn't just a focal point, it's a fulcrum that everything revolves around and that creates it's own leverage on otherwise minor emotions.
Also, you did such a great job keeping the tone if a youngster, which gives the dark intermingling with it so much more punch.
And the accretion of stressors is really well managed.
Wow. love it all!
I’m totally hooked.
It is just as powerful the second time reading. Holy - Merlin's balls this is so real. How did Harry loose it- how did Snape get it? Did he steal it when Harry was zoned out? Great use of italics, and statements from Harry's thoughts, the repetition. I liked your Neville too. Snape is spot on. I am so nervous for Harry right now. Please tell me you have more written.
WOAH. This was so intense, so good. Poor Harry, he really is a mess. He really needs help. I'm surprised his friends haven't stolen a sleeping draught from the infirmary for him. I hope Hermione forces him to go to see Madame Pomfrey. He's a wreck and everyone can see it. What a fantastic writing style and description. I could literally feel what he was feeling. My stomach is in knots just like Harry. Will Snape be cruel? Will he help? I can't wait to find out. Fantastic start. Thanks for much for wiriting and sharing it. |
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