| Title: Stranger
| 10 Sep 2005 7:06 am
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| Reviewer: heather (Anonymous)
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this is.. odd. i assume luc is snape? jamie's brother or something?
| Title: Stranger
| 17 Jun 2005 4:37 am
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| Reviewer: Yar Matey (Anonymous)
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I just read this and this is really good. Please keep up the good work!
| Title: Stranger
| 26 May 2005 4:39 pm
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| Reviewer: Olga (Anonymous)
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I actually likedthat story... What's going to be in the next chapter?!
| Title: Stranger
| 19 Mar 2005 11:23 pm
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| Reviewer: Torina Archelda (Anonymous)
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I love it, but who is Luc? At first I thought it was Lucius (which would be creepy, BTW) and then you said he had dark hair so I thought it was Sev, but then you called him Luc in a speaker tag, so it can't just be a nickname... I'm confused! lol. Please update soon, I love this fic!
| Title: Stranger
| 26 Feb 2005 3:37 am
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| Reviewer: Anortai (Anonymous)
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Hmmm, for a 6-yr old the clarity in his mind of what is happening is astounding. As is his vocabulary. You say he reads lots of books, but he still would use contractions like don't and won't. And as he is English shouldn't his grammar be at least a little off? (jk :P)
You have a very good concept to start on, but i think you need to delve into the conciousness of the characters a bit more- it seems a superficial story up untill chapter 8. I'm guessing that Luc- is Snape? because that would fit the requirements of this site then wouldnt it? Plus the mention of obisidan eyes...
Rather astounding don't you think?
Another point is the originality of the name Sandy, all snakes that become Harry's pet seemed to be named Sandy.
Overall, a good concept but Harry is too grown up. Being so intellectually advanced is simply not possible for a 5-6 yr old. He needs to be more child-like. Let him have some fun.
Excellent chapter!! I love seeing Severus swooping in like some avenging archangel. Hope there is more soon!
| Title: Stranger
| 20 Feb 2005 1:35 am
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| Reviewer: Gray Darken (Anonymous)
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Wow. What an amazing story! Its different from some of the other Harry!Orphanage stories, and its really good because of it. I was suprised when I read it. I really hope that you post more, I shall hope. ^o^ Thank you for posting your story!
nice ending...:p
really, I'd kill to know how the next chapter will be..
but no....no such luck ;)
so...come on, write more..
and soon!
| Title: Stranger
| 13 Feb 2005 8:23 pm
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| Reviewer: Kateri (Anonymous)
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Um, not quite sure what to think of it so far, but it is interesting enought that I'm curioius as to what will happen next
aww. Snape got Harry. I would be confused too. Ahhh. fun chapter. waiting for more, please?
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