this chapter seems different than what I remembered. I love the descriptions you have now- they are really well done. The part about the horse statue was a little over done though and the writing style seems a little stepped back. I don't know how to explain it right other than it feels like we are watching what is happening instead of living what is happening. Does that make sense?
I love your Snape and how mysterious he is popping up in random times. The part where Harry went to open the dorr the first time and Snape was standing there was better the previous rewrite, it used to be more suspenseful. Great chapter!
Author's Response: Somtimes I go a little nuts on one item. :) Like the horse statue. I was almost going to have Harry accidentally break it at one point, but I didn't want Snape to want to murder him for ruining an heirloom. Maybe I can still put that in a later chappie, eh? Now that things between them are going to change... :)
| Title: Warm Cider and Cold Words
| 26 Jan 2005 4:05 am
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:) Lovely chapter. I love how mysterious Snape is, it's so scary actually and a wonderful version of his character to have. you have some wonderful descriptions. I would have added another line before "This time he would not fall back asleep. He wanted to be aware of what was going on." in the beginning because it didn't show any passage of time. I love your interpretation of the interaction between Harry and Snape. Wonderful.
Author's Response: You know that's why I love fanfics. In reality (if they were real people) it would be so hard to force them to work together (or whatever) without having major problems (whether emotional or actual fist fighting). In my fics they never really like each other (like they wouldn't want to hang out together), but they aren't ever going to punch one another... they'll just scream and throw glares back and forth ;) (just kidding... sorta)
| Title: Get out of Jail Free?
| 26 Jan 2005 4:00 am
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Wow, this is so good. Harry's desperation and single mindedness on surviving was so sad, the fact that he would go back to his cupboard without a word or protest for a bit of toast and a glass of water... the poor boy. I LOVE how you have Snape being neutral, we can't really know what he is thinking. Very nicely done. I think that that is one of my favourite things about this story- that we don't know what Snape's motives are or what he's thinking at first.
Author's Response: You know what I hate in fics like this is when the writer makes it so that Snape is really sympathetic straight off. I highly doubt that a man like Snape would ever act like that. He's quite cold in my opinion, and I think that he'd take time to begin to act like he has a bit of humanity in him. I think he would like to believe that it isn't there, but I wouldn't let him do that forever, hehe. :)
| Title: Why did I do that?
| 26 Jan 2005 3:55 am
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Wow this is interesting. I can't remember if you had the distatched Harry before of if this is new. Poor Harry. :( (BTW, I think that you should have had either a horizontal rule or some *** between the scene changes.) you have some great imagry in this chapter.
Author's Response: I'm glad you like the imagery. I have a hard time with that. I really have to put a lot of thought into how things would look from one Pov to another. thanks :)
the choice is to fight or to flight. In most causes I'd probably want to flight. hehe. I'm kinda chicken...:)
Author's Response: I totally would want to run too!
it's okay to cry. again, poor Harry he has to go through so much. (the pleasure of being authors?) Snape...he's not nothing, he's just very good at hiding his feelings. Of course being a Death Eater he would have had to get good at it fast...:D
Author's Response: Snape is very, very good at concealing his feelings... at times he reminds me of an ugly James Bond. He is a spy after all, hehe. :)
Ah, Professor Snape to the rescue! yay! The hero of the day? probably not...hehe. ;)
Author's Response: Not really the person that I would want to see if I was Harry, but since I'm not... hehe. Bring on the Snape!;)
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