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Title: Progress 18 May 2008 8:10 pm
Reviewer: Scorpia (Signed) [Report This]
    Hmm, still interested. I like all the different Harry's, lol. Are there more, I wonder.
Title: Progress 22 Apr 2007 12:01 am
Reviewer: Celebwen Telcontar (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh my... I just realized that Harry and company sound a bit like the Smeagol/Gollum conversation in Return of the King and the argument in The Two Towers of the Lord of the Rings trilogy. Of course, the Ring's posession of a person could be said as bringing out a second, completely evil personality, but that conversation in the first part of this chapter was well done. I applaud you.
Title: Progress 10 Nov 2005 3:35 am
Reviewer: Kira (Anonymous) [Report This]

    i am so jelous this is kick ass!

     

     

Title: Progress 21 Mar 2005 6:18 am
Reviewer: TheShadowPanther (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Very interesting. How many personalities does Harry/Potter have? There's a lot already, and there seem to be only more coming, such as this mysterious James.... UPDATE! This is the first fic I've ever read or even reviewed in my FIRST visit to Potions and Snitches, so unless I find more fics, I'm going to be checking up on this one! Cya!

    Author's Response: Well, I was just going to do one chapter a day, but maybe I'll pick it up a little, just for you ;)
Title: Progress 21 Mar 2005 5:21 am
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    I forgot to mention in the last chapter that the part where Harry (I think it was James) started saying "We" seemed a little odd. I mean to say that James would be used to saying "I" when talking outloud. It was good to have it there as a slip but I think that you used it a little too often at first. Your italics didn't make it over to this archive, I can fix them for you if you'd like.

    When Harry switched after Ron mentioned Sirius, I was a little confused as to who he switched to as because it seemed like he switched to himself, Harry. Haha I loved how Snape first thought of the situation and that he couldn't explain to Harry what was going on but then went "If he wasn’t faking. Which he was. That’s what Potters did.". That was a great line. I love how Harry/Tom came to Snape's office demanding that Snape take the amulet off. I had to assume that there was something that made it so that Harry couldn't. I love the "What say you." line Snape said when he compromised about seeing the nurse. That was very in character, very older British sounding and not many authors do stuff like that. And it was cute when Foster said he wanted a pudding. :) I loved how Snape walked Tom to the hospital, how he stategically walked behind him to make sure he didn't walk away. I liked how Snape had Poppy take a break to talk to Tom- that he noticed that tom wasn't holding up well and the switch to Danny. The introduction of that side was done really well- great past refrences tied in smoothly. They really added to the quality of the chapter. It was interesting that you capitalized 'Flying', that give a title to it and shows that Snape recognizes that it is something meaningful to Harry. Did you do it on purpose? I loved how when Harry came back at the end that he looked at his watch and then made up an excuse and Snape's reaction to that. I'm glad that you told this part from Snape's POV. Last nitpicking thing: You forgot the ending quotation mark on “Sorry, sir. I didn’t realize it was after curfew, I was just going for a walk.

    This chapter and your writing is very flowing and it really moves- I get easily sucked into it which isn't something that all, maybe not even most authors can do. I'm really enjoying this story. Thanks for posting it here!

    Author's Response: Hmmm, I see what you mean about the 'We' stuff. And I would be deeply in your debt if you would fix my italics. Again, thanks for the little correction with the quotes, I've fixed both those problems on the main file now. Ta!

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