| Title: Kibbles and Bits
| 02 Jul 2005 5:53 pm
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| Reviewer: Kateri (Anonymous)
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INteresting begining. The dog food was a nice touch i think
| Title: Kibbles and Bits
| 10 Jun 2005 1:07 am
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| Reviewer: Miss Insane (Anonymous)
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Sad but becoming happy. How old is Harry? Can't wait to read more. :) :)
You know, the title of this chapter stopped me and almost made me laugh- it was like funny but sad too! Anyways, the way Dumbledore eats sweets I'm surprised that his teeth aren't as yellow as Snape's. I wonder if Snape will ever really try to "shut up a bratty child" by shoving candy at him later. And btw, what is a Chick-o-stick?
I felt that leaving Harry in the cupboard for a few days would have worked out fine, and that the garden had gradually been neglected as the Dursley's were packing, but the decription of the house having stale air seems a little too much, too long. Do you think?
About the cleaning liquids in the cupboard, do you think that the Dursley's might have wanted Harry to drink them? to die? O.O Like if the boy were left there for so long and was so thirsty... Anyways, I feel that there are some descriptions missing from when Snape dropped the boy on a clean hospital bed- like when I read that I was trying to look at Harry and see how he was reacting to all this and the state of him. We were told nothing. : When Harry thought about the lady looking at his hands, I thought that that was very in character for such a young child. Children that young have problems telling magic from reality and their logic's weird, so it makes perfect sense that the woman would be able to tell what bad he did with his hands. : Poor little boy. It seemed a little weird that Poppy didn't talk to him at first, reassure him, at it seemed a little out of character that she would be humming a cheerful tune when a filty, neglected and very dehydrated almost to death little boy was placed in her hospital, no matter what kind of wonderful vacation she's going to next. XD And Dumbledore- you've managed to get the meddling, git Dumbledore this time it seems- NICE. I can't wait to see what happens if Dumbledore tries to play the grandfather role with the little boy, but Snape knows how he really feels, doesn't care. *kicks him* Anyways, great first chapter! Nice depth and it's plenty different form the other ones out there. Thanks for posting! I'm giving you a seven.
| Title: Kibbles and Bits
| 09 Jun 2005 12:45 pm
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| Reviewer: silverbirch (Anonymous)
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This is an excellent start! I'm eager to see how Harry copes with his new situation, and how Snape does!
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