| Title: Chapter 30 - Bats and Dragons
| 16 Feb 2014 10:25 am
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| Reviewer: crotia (Signed)
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| Title: Chapter 30 - Bats and Dragons
| 09 Oct 2008 7:24 pm
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| Reviewer: shan (Anonymous)
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great story! continue updating! will await new chapters. :)
| Title: Chapter 30 - Bats and Dragons
| 08 Sep 2008 12:03 pm
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| Reviewer: forest (Anonymous)
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More please, pweety please
I just discovered this story a couple of days ago. Great story. I don't believe I've read Harry written quite this way before. Loved it. Can't wait for the next chapter.
oh please more! i just re-read this and im all excited for more again!
Yay! I'm so happy you updated! This story is one of my absolute favourites and I was so happy to see you updated. Now if only I could do so as well for my story. XD
I found Harry's story adorable, I'm so glad you shared that with us. I have to say though that I find the whole 'abused Draco' clichéd. Sorry, but that is my humble opinion. This stry is cute and sweet, I love the emotions!
This chapter was great! I thought the bit with Draco was wonderful and I love how Harry is now confused about Draco's relationship with his father. Keep up the amazing work.
| Title: Chapter 30 - Bats and Dragons
| 07 Apr 2008 6:01 pm
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| Reviewer: Mahi (Anonymous)
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Awww! I love this chapter. Harry is sooo adorable. I felt so sorry for him when Snape spanked him and the "I...sniff...dont like you anymore" line was classic for a child who has just been punished. I love the way you show that Harry is still a child. And I felt so sorry for him, being spanked bare! Poor thing.
I am also interested in finding out what's going on with Draco.
I am happy to see that you allowed Harry to be caring and nice to Draco since it is in his character to help people. Although I think he would have been a little jealous. Maybe not a lot but still, he's just getting used to the idea of Snape being HIS dad and its natural for kids to be jealous of other people taking away their parents' attention, especially when its another kid.
Great story all in all!
Oh and I dont mind the OOCness as you put it since sometimes JKR's treatment of Harry is less than realistic.
I had to chuckle a bit at the 'much OOCness comment ;) Even though it's true in a sense, I still adore your Harry. Snape is strict, as he should be, but the way you write fluff isn't annoying at all. It's heart-warming.
You really focus on the fact that no matter how old a person gets, he is still a *child* to the one who takes care of him. In Harry's case, he always feels childish around Snape, and that's okay. I also appreciate your ability to imply a sound spanking without actually going into a heap of details.
* "I could have lost you, Harry." And Harry cried like there was no tomorrow, Snape's soft tone lashing harshly at his heart. *
I love the fact that you used the word *lashing* to describe Severus's soft words. See, you show us that Harry is torn to pieces by Severus's disappointment and his own guilt over doing something dangerous. Both Pdantzler and Tracy have succeeded with this same scenario, as well, and I just want to give all of you (my original fanfic heroes and inspiration) a viritual high-five. LOL. Dorky, I know.
But thanks ;)
Overall, great chapter, Dina! I think I read your story when I first discovered fanfiction and hadn't realized that I could leave an anonymous review without being a member. So I'm sorry about the lack of them. I have been enjoying your story for a long time. And I can't wait for another update!
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