| Title: Chapter 12 - Retaliation I
| 18 Aug 2005 8:47 pm
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| Reviewer: Mel (Anonymous)
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Geat chapter! Can't wait for the next one.
Should be an intersting week for the Dursleys. I wonder how Snape and Dudley will get along.
Please update soon!
| Title: The werewolf Incident
| 13 Aug 2005 10:26 pm
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| Reviewer: Thrior (Anonymous)
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Oh God! This was so good. At a same time it was funny and touching. I absolutely loved how you described Snape's toughs. He was all like: "I'll save them and then I'll kill them myself." XD Sounds so much like good old Snape. Hehe.
And that spanking -scene was a classic. *laughs* My favorite line was: "Mr. Potter, you know that you have scared me to death?"
| Title: Chapter 11 - End of Term
| 11 Aug 2005 10:53 pm
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| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed)
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LOL, your disclaimer rocked!! This chapter was sooo much better! Wow! What an improvement! :) McGonagall chewing Harry out was a riot, the poor boy. I loved Harry's day dreaming, especially about Snape putting peas on his plate! I honestly thought that it was real before Harry was snapped out of it by his friends. I love the day dreams, awesome. haha, Snape's detention was funny, and crazy! A three foot essay? Yikes! And Harry naming 10 punishments, oh boy. Poor kid. I laughed when Snape told him what number 10 was to be, LOL! I thought that Snape's thoughts are a little out of character, but still okay for a story. I liked that Snape didn't really give Harry any of the punishments he wrote down, it was good to give him a break and writing that essay sure was tough! I'm glad that Harry was able to apologize to Dumbledore and that Dumbledore forgave him. The ending was so cute and sweet. I was smiling.
After all it was intended to heart, he was punishing the boy for Merlin’s sake. hurt. Sorry it's taking so long to do chapter one, i've been working on some other stuff but i'll try to get it to you soon! :D
| Title: Chapter 10 - Some Trouble
| 10 Aug 2005 2:22 am
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| Reviewer: Spiorad (Signed)
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Wonderful chapter I loved it. I really like the Harry and Snape relationship. Its different from other ones like this.
Do you know of any other "spanking" stories? I would like to read them.
| Title: Chapter 10 - Some Trouble
| 08 Aug 2005 5:45 pm
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| Reviewer: Micheela (Anonymous)
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You really had me going; I honestly believed that Ron and Hermione had ratted Harry out (accidentally) and that he was being sent back to the Dursley. I know it was just a dream but it tells me that Harry feels he can no longer trust his friends. It is also an indication on how much he now trusts Severus. Excellent chapter and thanks for the insight into Harry subconscious.
| Title: Chapter 10 - Some Trouble
| 06 Aug 2005 11:20 am
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| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed)
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I love this line: "come with me, make haste." And this one had a big awww factor: Harry was really sorry and wanted to apologize even if Snape did not want him anymore. Awww! Poor, poor lost boy. I really, really loved the emotions, feelings and events in this chapter, you really managed to get the intensity out! Wonderful! As usualy though, there are a lot of mistakes and such. This is not an offer I make often (if ever at all) but if you would like, I wouldn't mind sending you a copy of all the chapters with edits done in red text for you to see and study, or post instead. I think that once you start seeing and noticing some things that you will be able to not make the same mistakes later, or at least make them less frequently. So, are you game? Do you want me to do that? Let me know.
Jan
| Title: Chapter 9 - Dreaming
| 04 Aug 2005 9:21 am
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| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed)
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Oh! I absolutely LOVE the changing memories Harry is doing! That is really original and unique and great!! It was such a sweet dream too. :) You might want to check the rating of this story and chapter though, because it gave me a slash warning, and I don't think that that is supposed to be there.
It's a good story. You should probably check through the chapters more though, because if you don't use a beta you need to fix all the mistakes yourself.
| Title: Chapter 8 - Buckbeak II
| 04 Aug 2005 12:43 am
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| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed)
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I liked this line a lot: He was still shrinking from Snape but somehow it started to feel different. I loved Snape's lecturing, yelling rant. Aw, but you cheated us out of the spanking scene! :P The afterwards made up for it though. I loved this name: a"sorry Potter" LOL.
| Title: Chapter 8 - Buckbeak II
| 01 Aug 2005 7:47 pm
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| Reviewer: Micheela (Anonymous)
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This is exactly what Harry needed; a loving parental figure who will discipline him when needed. Eagerly awaiting the next installment.
| Title: Chapter 8 - Buckbeak II
| 30 Jul 2005 10:48 pm
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| Reviewer: Spiorad (Signed)
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Awww! This was a cute chapter, I really liked it!
Can I ask where you got the idea to use spanking in this fic?
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