This chapter was great! I thought the bit with Draco was wonderful and I love how Harry is now confused about Draco's relationship with his father. Keep up the amazing work.
| Title: Chapter 30 - Bats and Dragons
| 07 Apr 2008 6:01 pm
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| Reviewer: Mahi (Anonymous)
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Awww! I love this chapter. Harry is sooo adorable. I felt so sorry for him when Snape spanked him and the "I...sniff...dont like you anymore" line was classic for a child who has just been punished. I love the way you show that Harry is still a child. And I felt so sorry for him, being spanked bare! Poor thing.
I am also interested in finding out what's going on with Draco.
I am happy to see that you allowed Harry to be caring and nice to Draco since it is in his character to help people. Although I think he would have been a little jealous. Maybe not a lot but still, he's just getting used to the idea of Snape being HIS dad and its natural for kids to be jealous of other people taking away their parents' attention, especially when its another kid.
Great story all in all!
Oh and I dont mind the OOCness as you put it since sometimes JKR's treatment of Harry is less than realistic.
I had to chuckle a bit at the 'much OOCness comment ;) Even though it's true in a sense, I still adore your Harry. Snape is strict, as he should be, but the way you write fluff isn't annoying at all. It's heart-warming.
You really focus on the fact that no matter how old a person gets, he is still a *child* to the one who takes care of him. In Harry's case, he always feels childish around Snape, and that's okay. I also appreciate your ability to imply a sound spanking without actually going into a heap of details.
* "I could have lost you, Harry." And Harry cried like there was no tomorrow, Snape's soft tone lashing harshly at his heart. *
I love the fact that you used the word *lashing* to describe Severus's soft words. See, you show us that Harry is torn to pieces by Severus's disappointment and his own guilt over doing something dangerous. Both Pdantzler and Tracy have succeeded with this same scenario, as well, and I just want to give all of you (my original fanfic heroes and inspiration) a viritual high-five. LOL. Dorky, I know.
But thanks ;)
Overall, great chapter, Dina! I think I read your story when I first discovered fanfiction and hadn't realized that I could leave an anonymous review without being a member. So I'm sorry about the lack of them. I have been enjoying your story for a long time. And I can't wait for another update!
Oh that was totally great. I love the way that Harry was pestering Severus to tell him what he did to Fred and George, it was very cute and Harry like. I'm ery intrested to see what the heck is going on with the Malfoys, and to find out if Draco is going to be staying for a while. I can't imagine that Harry is going to be thrilled to any extent if that happens. Love that you updated, love your story keep up the great work, and please update again soon. LES
| Title: Chapter 30 - Bats and Dragons
| 06 Apr 2008 7:34 pm
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| Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous)
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PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE DON'T MAKE US WAIT SO LONG!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I REALLY LOVE THIS STORY!!!!!!!!!! PLEASE UPDATE SOON!! PRETTY PLEASE WITH A CHERRY ON TOP!!!!!
THANKS FOR THE NEW UPDATE!!!!!!!!!
| Title: Chapter 30 - Bats and Dragons
| 06 Apr 2008 5:59 pm
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| Reviewer: kreacher (Signed)
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another great chapter, the reading of harrys story was great and snape telling everyone that he was proud of harry was very touching, harry helping with draco was very nice of him, snape going to malfoy manor, wonder what severus did, i hope it hurt, well can't wait for the next chapter
So great to see you writing on this story. I look for to each and every chapter.
| Title: Chapter 30 - Bats and Dragons
| 06 Apr 2008 4:53 am
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| Reviewer: Vickie (Anonymous)
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I love your story very much and look forward to each chapter. Keep up the great job!!!!!!!
| Title: Chapter 17 - Home Coming
| 20 Mar 2008 5:44 am
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| Reviewer: Harriverse (Anonymous)
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A touchingly human portrayal of Snape. And a wonderfully realistic progression of their relationship. In fact, Severus is amazingly considerate, compasionate, and affectionate for someone who has had his life, even if it has only been hinted at so far!
Great story here and I love all the emotions and Severus was right to spank Harry for nearly getting himself and his friends killed, the kid gets away with far too much!
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