I really hope that Harry and Snape’s first meeting after the letters goes well
Wow, what a shock for Harry! I like the original twist you have on this.
On to the next chappie!
Title: Little Serpent
| 28 Mar 2006 2:47 am
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Reviewer: Dire Wolfe (Anonymous)
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Yeah, I knew that I liked you for a reason. Dire Wolfe
Title: Little Serpent
| 28 Sep 2005 7:29 am
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Reviewer: khaosfire (Anonymous)
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The letter is very descriptive and straight-forward - in a letter. This, however, is a story. If you wish to improve it, you should likely remove some of the monotony, well-written though it is.
Author's Response: I will, don't worry about that. The letters are important in the first chapters, and they do make the story go slower. But after chapter seven the story will get more 'action'
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