Unsorted!
The sequel to Never Again!
Things are going well for the Snape family, after the near disasters of the past year, except for a few minor mishaps. But when Harry meets two new Muggleborn witches in his primary school, one of whom has a mother Sev decides to date, Harry must realize that he’s not the only person in his father’s life anymore. And so, like any child, he must go through the sometimes frustrating, occasionally funny, and totally bewildering process of growing up, with help from Tobias, of course.
Takes Place: 0 - Pre Hogwarts (before Harry is 11)
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Snape flavour: None
Tags: Adoption, Alternate Universe, Child fic, Kidnapped
Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Membership status: Member
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Reviews by DiverSam
Rated: K+
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Warnings: Physical Punishment Spanking, Profanity, Violence
Chapters: 27 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 17 Jun 2008 / 07 May 2008
Series: Never Again! - Challenges: None
Chapters: 27 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 17 Jun 2008 / 07 May 2008
Series: Never Again! - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 22: A Light In The Darkness | 12 Jun 2008 |
| Reviewer: DiverSam (Signed) |
- Azkaban for Dan
Author's Response: You'll see Dan's fate in the next chapter! It ain't pretty.
After trying to commit suicide, Harry is sent to live with Snape. But, will Snape be able to show Harry that he is loved and need before it is too late?
Takes Place: 4th summer - Snape flavour: Snape Comforts, Snape is Kind, Overly-protective Snape, Snape is Stern
Tags: Addicted!Harry, Adoption
Categories: Healer Snape, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Takes Place: 4th summer - Snape flavour: Snape Comforts, Snape is Kind, Overly-protective Snape, Snape is Stern
Tags: Addicted!Harry, Adoption
Categories: Healer Snape, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: T
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Alcohol Use, Out of Character, Profanity, Self-harm, Suicide Themes
Chapters: 1 - Completed: No - Updated: 09 Jul 2014 / 08 Jul 2014
Series: None - Challenges: None
Chapters: 1 - Completed: No - Updated: 09 Jul 2014 / 08 Jul 2014
Series: None - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 1: I Tried | 09 Jul 2014 |
| Reviewer: DiverSam (Signed) |
- I like the premise of the story. It should prove interesting.
As far as your writing I agree with one of your other reviewers. The pace of the scenes seem forced. And I would suggest changing your tense. I have written in the past and understand how difficult it is to write in 3rd person without getting to descriptive. Keep going. We are here to help you.
Author's Response: Thanks! And I have edited the first chapter to third person as best as I can. And for the pace I shall try to take it slower. Thank you for reading and reviewing!